Not Your Fairy Tale Romance
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Title (4.5/5)
I like the meaning of it but given your level of English I would have liked something more deep, flowery with poetic touch.
Foreward/Description (8/10)
I love your description. But I would have liked something into Luna/Kris in the foreword.
Appearance (3/5)
I think its average and I'm not sure if Kris should be included as well since he's kind of an important character here.
Plot (12/15)
I really loved the story. I usually give a lot of comments here but your general storyline and flow is good. Nothing shocking or out of the blue; quite a typical abusive boyfriend knight in shining armour kind of story but written very well.
Penalizing you slightly here because I expected you to have better closure; particularly on Kris. Also on Luna's emotional recovery and what took her so long to come back etc.
Originality (14/15)
Quite a typical story as mentioned above but a nice introduction to the fanfiction world so giving you higher scores here as well.
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
Really nothing to penalize here, you have great language.
Flow (8/10)
Could be a bit too draggy in chapters making it quite tiring to read; you could put more into emotions instead of description.
Characterization (9/10)
I know them but once again maybe more emotions would be nice since this is quite an emotional story; abuse does a lot to someone internally.
Overall Enjoyment (8/10)
Like mentioned above, you're a great writer so it makes reading very enjoyable but chapters are too draggy. Keep up the good work!
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
86.5/100!
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