Change Like The Seasons
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Title (2/5)
To be honest it's a bit hard to determine if the title fits the story considering that it's only 3 chapters in. But I do not like the phrasing/English of the title; it doesn't quite make sense. I'm guessing this person/his emotions/his personality changes like the four seasons but here "change" feels like a noun and it becomes wrong.
Foreword/Description (7/10)
It's enticing; I give that to you but it gives no hint to what to expect out of the story.
Appearance (5/5)
I'll give you full marks for this; I like the feel of the front page with the appropriate pretty images, the layout of each chapter is also nice looking and I was surprised the fonts came out readable.
Plot (5/15)
To be honest, I can't tell the direction of this story right now and the characters seem very confusing.
He/She is apparently some popular kid and has some EXO members as his friend...that's all I can grasp. I'm sorry.
Originality (10/15)
Hard to judge once again but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt because I see conflicts.
Language (10/20)
Your general writing style is very confusing albeit giving a nice poetic feel. It sounds like a first person narration/ a diary entry but you mix thoughts of the past and present with current happenings and it's very confusing.
- Hence comes the error in tenses; you switch between present and past in the middle of a sentence/passage which is wrong.
- Do not put random korean words in without explaining and without significance
- Grammatical errors here and there.
Overall I could barely understand your story.
Flow (2/10)
There was simply none; to me, nothing happened.
Characterization (5/10)
I can't even tell if the person is a male or female at times; right now I'm bordering on a gay male.
None of his friends have any character either.
Overall Enjoyment (2/10)
I'm sorry but it was hard for me to digest. Maybe it's too early in the story.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
50/100!
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