* Dust in the Wind
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Title (4/5)
The title was a bit unpredictable because it could either be literal or metaphorical. But as I finished your story, I think it was a little bit of both and it wasn’t that overwhelming or cringingly cheesy like other fics out there.
Foreward/Description (8/10)
The foreword was a bit cliché because of the blind date thing and the friends-turned-lovers concept. It also had a serious feel to it (subtle, but detectable) so I think it’s not that bad for a foreword.
Appearance (3/5)
I’ll just give you a three because you don’t have a poster.
Plot (14/15)
Junhong and Daehyun’s parts were balanced and the emotions present in the story were expressed well. It was leaning towards the heavy type of fiction since it didn’t contain rainbows and sunshine, but it’s worth the read.
Originality (13/15)
The whole story may be a wonderful piece of fiction, but it’s not the most original fic I’ve read.
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
My eyes might be playing tricks on me, but I didn’t see any grammatical mistakes. Congrats! lol
Flow (9/10)
There were times when the flow accelerated a bit before it resumed its steady pace of elaborating Daehyun and Junhong’s relationship. I understood this occurrence because this wasn’t a chaptered fic so you guys didn’t have to elaborate everything that’s in the plot.
Characterization (9/10)
Daehyun’s character was the most established of all because he was, technically, the main character of the story. Junhong was a little bit behind, although I kind of connected how his personality would be in his life’. The other characters weren’t that prioritized since they didn’t have much roles compared to the two.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
I really liked your writing style… and there’s two of you? Even if you mentioned how this aspect would change a bit, I didn’t notice it while I was reading. Good job on completing a wonderful fic. I hope you guys start trying other unique concepts in the future and avoid the death endings lol.
Reviewed by: Madchen
Score: 91/100
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