The Last Week Begins

A Fangirl's Dream

*Rebecca’s POV*

We spent the next few weeks doing various activities, going on dates, and bonding like one big family. We visited Carolyn every other day –Taemin everyday- until she was well enough to come back to the mansion. She was in a wheelchair, but at least she was home. Taemin set up the downstairs bedroom for her so she wouldn’t have to worry about the stairs. Time escaped us, and a sad reality seemed to wash over the mansion. There was only one week left. One week until this dream had to come to an end. But, all things must come to an end, ne?

“Who wants to go swimming?” Minho asked excitedly.

“Me!” shouted Nicole. We all stared at her, surprised by her excitement. “Hey, a girl’s gotta cool down somehow,” she shrugged.

“I’ll sit out on this one guys,” said Taemin. “Carolyn and I are going to take a walk through the garden.”

Carolyn smiled graciously at her boyfriend as he walked over to his position behind her wheelchair and rolled her down the ramp toward the garden.

“Well Key was actually going to teach me the dance to ‘Gee’,” Brianna blushed.

We looked over to Key, only to see him smiling proudly, “I know that dance better than SNSD themselves! You’ll be a pro by the end of the week!”

“Well, that is all we have left,” Brianna answered, a gloomy feeling falling over the previously happy patio area.

“Come on yebo; let’s go,” Key offered Brianna his hand and she took it. They walked into the mansion, Key with one arm wrapped around her shoulders.

“Well since Jonghyun and Annie are out, it looks like it’s just you, me, Nicole and… hey, where’s Onew?” Minho asked.

“I’ll go find him,” I said getting up. “I’m sure he’d love to go swimming too!”

I hurried into the mansion and checked the downstairs first. I found Brianna and Key in the family room, ‘Gee’ cranking over the stereo system. They said they hadn’t seen Onew. I continued my search upstairs, starting with his room.

“Onew?” I called as I cracked open the door and peaked inside. “Onew?” I stepped inside, closing the door behind me. Now where could this boy have gone?

Suddenly something caught my ear. I listened closely and what I heard surprised me. It was Onew’s voice. He was singing along with a piano and it sounded quite lovely. The weird thing was, it seemed as if the sound was coming from the walls… no; overhead?

“Onew?” I called again, more cautiously this time.

I looked around the room until my eyes finally rested on the bookcase. It was pulled away from the wall, and instead of brick behind it, there was a large hole. Actually, it was more of a doorway, just like in the movies.

I made my way toward the bookcase, Onew’s voice and piano playing becoming more audible the closer I got. Pulling the bookcase a little further from the wall, I slipped behind it and through the doorway. I was immediately greeted by a brick wall. However, I turned to my left to see a set of old, wooden stairs leading upwards. I ascended the stairs cautiously, but stopped when I was almost to the top and just listened.

(This is the song he was singing: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qQUpR2UjBnA).

I sat on the hardwood steps with my eyes closed, swaying to the music. It was as if he was spilling out his heart through words. Even though I didn’t speak Korean, I somehow understood what he was saying. The desperation in his voice; the meaning of each word; it was all so passionate. A tear slowly made its way down my cheek.

*Onew’s POV*

I thought many things as I sang that song. Rebecca and I would be parting soon. The girl who brought me a kind of happiness I’d never experienced before. I’d never been in love like this. It felt like every part of my body was shutting down; begging to stay with her. My heart cried with the song. I could barely finish due to the tears stinging at my eyes. When the song finally came to a finish, so did the holding back of my tears. I rested my arms on the top of the piano and put my face in my arms, letting the tears slip out of my brown, almond eyes, one by one.

“Oppa?”

I froze at the sound and quickly wiped my tears away the best I could before turning to face Rebecca.

“How did you find me?” I asked, trying to sound like I totally hadn’t just been crying.

“I came into your room looking for… for you… and I…,” she began to shake her head back and forth slowly. I could see her eyes beginning to gloss over. “Oh oppa!” she cried, running toward me.

I embraced her tightly as tears fell out of her eyes like a waterfall. We sat on opposite sides of the piano bench, but I released her quickly and slipped around to face the same way. As soon as I got back around we clung to each to each other again.

“Oppa,” she pulled away to look into my eyes. “I’m going to m-m-miss you so… much,” she squeaked the last word out.

Don’t cry Onew. Be strong for her. Don’t…

It was too late. My tears escaped my eyes. We cried together in the hidden music room, surrounded by dusty instruments and disorganized sheet music. Sunlight streamed in through two small windows that were on the back wall overlooking the garden. The rays illuminated every dust particle in their path.

*Achoo!* Rebecca sneezed cutely.

“Sorry,” she whispered. “Allergies.”

“No need to be sorry yebo,” I smiled.

“Oh, see there you go again,” she pulled away from me and walked over to one of the windows.

“What?” I asked, confused.

“You’re so sweet and just… just perfect! I don’t want to say goodbye. I know I’m eight years younger than you and this is a crazy match but, I’ve never met someone like you. You’re the kind of guy I thought only existed in dreams and fairytales. Yet here you are, in all your perfection and I have to lose you.”

“Rebecca,” I said softly, getting up and walking over to her. I tried to hug her, but she stopped me.

“No oppa. If you hug me, it’s only going to make me love you more. I have to start letting go.”

“No you don’t,” I whispered. “I know we’re going to be apart for a little while. Things will be tough, but I want to stick with you through it all. We’ve already conquered so many problems together; age, language, plain out shyness; distance is just another bump in the road. Don't you dare start to let go now.”

“But, I still have three more years of school! Even after I get out of school, I can’t immediately just fly over to South Korea and desert my family. I’d need more time. By then you could already have a family. You could be happily married-,”

“I don’t want a family, Rebecca. Not with anyone but you. I’ll wait forever if I have to. Even if I’m old and wrinkly sitting in a nursing home, I promise you this: I will wait for you.”

“Jinki,” she brushed a hand across my cheek and I put my hand of top of it, closing my eyes at her touch. “I don’t deserve you.”

“You deserve the world.”

“You could do so much better than me.”

“You are perfect.”

“Why did you choose me?”

“Because; I love you.”

She slipped into my arms as our lips locked, joined by salty tears.

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~