On the Road to Recovery

A Fangirl's Dream

*Key’s POV*

Unlike the ride there, I enjoyed sitting with Brianna on the ride back. We argued and teased each other, but now we both knew that it had more meaning than that. When I insulted her and she snapped back with a smart comment, we were really saying how much we cared about each other.

*Carolyn’s POV*

I didn’t mind the fact that Nicole was sitting on my left, because Taemin was on my other side, and now we were free to hold hands.

“I’m so glad this is all finally out in the open,” I remarked, squeezing Taemin’s hand.

He smiled back at me, then went back to the movie we had been watching on his iPad. I didn’t and laugh. Gosh, I love his laugh!

*Onew’s POV*

Kill me now. Kill me now. Kill me now. Kill me now.

I had avoided Rebecca all morning, but reality hit me when we began filing into the van. I was going to have to sit next to her for three hours. What made it even more awkward was that we never really admitted our feelings to each other. They just kind of existed. Both of us knew about them, but we pretended we didn’t. This made it more awkward because now I couldn’t say sorry and she couldn’t say why she was angry. It was just all insanely awkward!!!

*Rebecca’s POV*

I was sitting as close to Minho as my seatbelt would let me. I had to begin healing my heart, and it didn’t help that Onew was sitting right next to me. It was now my job to get over him. Minho could treat me better anyway.

Since we left early in the morning, I pretended to be tired so I wouldn’t have to talk. Minho let me lean my head against him and ‘fall asleep’. I held onto his arm, sitting snuggled up against him. I felt so safe with him, but then I’d peak over to see Onew sitting to my right, and I’d feel the pain come back.

“I have to use the bathroommmmmm,” Nicole complained.

“But we just stopped!” argued the manager.

“Um, when a girl has to use the bathroom, you don’t argue back!”

He immediately shut up and switched into the lane heading down the off ramp.

“Now, anybody that has to go, do it now!” the manager said.

I didn’t have to go, so I pretended to still just be asleep against Minho’s arm.

“Minho, if you have to go, wake her up and go. I’m not stopping again,” the manager directed.

“No, I’m fine,” he answered.

“Suit yourself,” I heard the manager say before shutting the doors.

The voices outside the van began to fade until it was dead silent. The only sound was of Minho’s and my breathing. Finally I decided to break the silence.

“Minho?” I startled him with my voice.

“Oh, I thought you were asleep,” he said, once he realized it was my voice that had spoken.

“Minho, I need to ask you something,” I said, sitting up to look him in the eye.

“What is it?” 

I took his hand in mine and looked deep into his eyes. My heart kept telling me that it should be Onew sitting in front of me, but I ignored it. I had to get over Onew, and this was the first step.

“Minho, do you care about me?” I finally asked.

“Of course I care about you-,”

“No, I mean reallyyyy care about me.”

“Rebecca I… I don’t know if we’re allowed to do this. You’re assigned to Onew-,”

“So what? Your manager just so happened to put us in those pairings. They mean nothing when he’s not around.”

“They do to Key, Brianna, Carolyn and Taemin,” he answered.

“Yes, but what about to the rest of us?”

“I guess you’re right.”

“I’ll ask you again. Do you, Minho, have feelings for me?”

He brushed the hair out of my face with his free hand. “Rebecca, I’ve had feelings for you since the first day I met you-,”

At that I didn’t wait any longer. I leaned over and kissed him. After a second or two, I felt a smile growing across Minho’s face. He cupped my face in his hands and kissed me back.

I was now Minho’s. I told myself that the pain didn’t matter anymore. Onew didn’t matter anymore. I was on the road to recovery from Onew.

I like Minho. Minho is a good guy. I should totally like him. Yet why do I have to convince myself of this…? 

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~