Photo Shoot

A Fangirl's Dream

*Taemin’s POV*

When we finally got to the set the next day (after a seemingly endless car ride), I still wasn’t excited for this shoot. The worst part was that we were supposed to be shooting with our matches in couple shirts. Since Carolyn was in the hospital, I was assigned a NYC model in her place. Smiling for these pictures seemed like an impossible task.

“Taemin, this is the model you’ll be posing with,” the manager said, escorting a young girl toward me. “Her name is Elizabeth.”

I looked the girl up and down. She had red hair, just like Carolyn. She had brown eyes, just like Carolyn. She even looked about the same height as Carolyn. But she wasn’t Carolyn.

“Hi,” she smiled and offered me her hand.

I shook it weakly and gave her a halfhearted smile before turning around to wander, deep in thought.

How is Carolyn doing? Is everything okay? What if something goes wrong and I’m not there for her?! I’m stuck here with this fake Carolyn. Why couldn’t they just leave me out of the thing all together? What is so important about a photo shoot?

I heard the manager and Elizabeth talking, though they thought they were out of earshot.

“Is he okay?” Elizabeth asked. “He seemed kind of out of it.”

“His girlfriend, who was supposed to do this shoot with him, is in the hospital,” the manager explained, making me wince.

“Poor thing; that’s terrible!”

“I know, but we need him for this shoot, and the doctors say that she’s going to be fine. I want you to go talk to him while the others go first. See if you can get him to smile, okay?”

I heard the manager’s footsteps fade and Elizabeth’s come closer. I didn’t want to talk to her. How did they expect me to smile at a time like this?

“Hey,” Elizabeth said from behind. I took a deep breath and turned around to face her. “Um, want to talk?”

I shrugged, not caring about proper manners at this point. She motioned for us to sit down on couch against the wall.

“So, what’s her name?”

“Carolyn,” I answered simply, not even turning to look at her. I watched as Jonghyun and Annie posed cutely together in their couple shirts as the photographer shot away. They looked so happy together.

“How is she doing?”

“I don’t know, because I’m here instead of with her!” I snapped.

“Wow… you really love her.”

I was slightly taken aback by this remark because it was something I hadn’t been expecting at all. I turned to look at Elizabeth in question.

“I can tell,” she replied, practically reading my mind. “You’d give anything to be with her; I can see that.”

I nodded.

“So why didn’t you stay with her?”

I gave the girl a suspicious look, but finally decided that explaining wouldn’t hurt anything. “I’m paying for her medical bills because her uncle…” I went on to explain the whole story. Elizabeth sat quietly, nodding occasionally to ensure me that she was still listening. “So you see, if I want to take care of Carolyn, I need to continue working,” I ended.

“That is the most romantic thing I’ve ever heard!” Elizabeth exclaimed. “You’re a great guy.”

“Thanks,” I answered gloomily.

“Now what do you say we go get this shoot over with so you can get back to Carolyn. The faster you can put on a smile, the sooner you’ll be by her side again.”

I looked over at the set again to see Key holding Brianna bridal style, both wearing giant smiles on their faces. Their photo time was just about up, and I could see Rebecca and Onew waiting off to the side together holding hands. For the past few days Onew had been acting a lot more confident around Rebecca and they were really developing into a nice couple.

“I guess you’re right,” I sighed. “Let’s go.”

After some preparations it was our turn to go.  The couple shirt was surprisingly comfortable, and I really didn’t mind the pattern. However, when I saw Elizabeth wearing its match, I immediately hated the shirts. Carolyn would’ve looked so much better in it!

(Here’s what the couple shirts looked like:

Key& Brianna: http://lajavastyle.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/korean-clothing-couple-2012.jpg

Minho& Nicole: http://www.wholesale7.net/images/201107/goods_img/6044_P_1310705078254.jpg

Jonghyun& Annie: http://elinfashion.com/BookPic/pnz/ba2bf56144ea1c2e/02.jpg

Onew& Rebecca: http://koreanindo.files.wordpress.com/2010/03/66.jpg?w=743&h=498

Taemin& Carolyn/Elizabeth: http://wholesale7.net/images/201107/goods_img/6710_P_1311838689956.jpg)

“Okay; we’re ready for Taemin and Elizabeth!” the photographer said as they finished up with Minho and Nicole.  

 

 

 

*Ann to the yeongggg! Mmmm I need to work on my greetings>.< Anywayyy, ahhh I've been doing so many author babbles, but I have something important to say! Well, first I love you all. I must say it c: But I also have a shout out! I am reading a fanfic called The Fire in Your Heart by Taemint71893 and I loveeee it! It has a great plot and I'm addicted! Please go check it out(: She's a wonderful writer<3
P.S. Lub you guys! Hope you enjoy the double update today! This chapter is to help motivate my Carolyn Unni to finish her difficult homework. You can do it Unni!!!<3 xD Okay, this is me, going bye bye!

El link de story----> http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/156787/the-fire-in-your-heart-jonghyun-key-kidnap-onew-romance-shinee-taemin 

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~