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A Fangirl's Dream

*Rebecca’s POV*

I woke up to the feeling of something sharp clamping down on my left pointer finger.

“Ow!” I shouted, pulling it away on instinct. I examined my finger to see little teeth marks in it. I then looked over to see Onew looking at me in embarrassment. “Onew did you… BITE my finger?”

“Ummm,” his face was beat red. “I-I… I was having a dream about…”

“About what?” I asked, still very much confused and slightly afraid of what his answer would be.

“Chicken,” he answered quietly, looking down.

“You thought my finger was CHICKEN?!” I asked in astonishment.

He grabbed a pillow and hid his face in it. However, he pulled it away in confusion when I began to laugh uncontrollably.

“Oppa, you’re so funny!” I exclaimed. Suddenly I stopped. My eyes got wide. “Wait. What am I doing in your bed?! Oh my gosh! Did we-,”

“No, no, no! Remember? Last night we…” he hesitated before continuing, “…confessed, and you fell asleep in my lap. I kind of… um, I carried you to bed with me”

It all came flooding back to me. Each returning memory of the night brought a bigger smile to my face. Onew was looking down again, but slowly lifted his eyes up to look at me shyly. His hair fell cutely in his face.

“Oppa, you’re hair’s a mess. Let me fix it for you,” I laughed as I began to mess with his hair, smoothening it out. “There you go.”

He smiled at me awkwardly as I pulled away, but it still made my heart race. His aegyo was priceless. I just wanted to take him in my arms and kiss him over and over and never let him go. His hair, his voice, his red face; it was all too cute to handle. Most of all, I couldn’t believe that Onew was finally mine.

*Key’s POV*

“Ughhhharhhhh,” I groaned as my eyes fluttered open. My head was pounding and I felt dizzy. Where am I? What happened last night? I looked to my left to see Brianna asleep in a chair next to my bed.

“Brianna?” I mumbled, sticking out a finger and poking her arm. “Brianna?” She jerked awake looking groggy and overtired. I noticed her eyes were red and she was still in her clothes from yesterday. “Brianna, what happened?”

She looked at me cautiously before spilling. “I found out about you and Annie. I was angry at you and you went out and got drunk. Then some men beat you up.”

Did all that really happen? I remembered something about Annie and Brianna and being at the hospital, but no matter how hard I focused, I couldn’t recall the drinking and getting beat up.

*Brianna’s POV*

I could see that Key was very confused. I decided to try explaining more. “You went out searching for me because I ran out of the hospital. When you didn’t find me you walked into town. I followed you. I finally found you drunk in a bar. The people beat you up because you didn’t have enough money. I found you in the alleyway and called Rebecca telling them to pick us up.”

“D-d-did you take care of me all night?”

“Yes,” I answered simply as I stood up. “Now what do you want for breakfast.”

Instead of answering, Key reached out and took my hand. “You took care of me, even though you were angry at me.” He stared deep into my eyes. I felt his hand tighten around mine. “Thank you.”

“I never said I forgave you,” I said with a straight face.

“No, but you must still love me.” A smile spread across his face as he pushed the covers aside and swung his legs off the bed.

“Not necessari-,”

He pulled me in quickly, bringing my lips to his. He kissed me slowly and lovingly. I tried to resist, but I couldn’t. I found myself kissing him back. I sat down on his lap, wrapping one arm around his neck and resting the other on his chest. His arms were around my waist. I opened my eyes slowly as our lips came apart.

“You still love me,” he smirked.

“I hate that I love you.” I gave the collar of his shirt a tug, bringing us into another kiss. “But I do,” I whispered into his ear. “I’ll always love you.” 

 

 

 

*Sorry for not updating in a few days! The page loading error thing has been effecting ym computer really badly. It took me forever just to get this chapter up. Hopefully is it fixed soon and I can update more. In the mean time..... SHINee's BACKK!!!!! Check out and buy the songss:D Here's a quick dabble I wrote, inspired by the song 'Honesty', which is by far my favorite. It has nothing to do with my actual story though. Here it is:

 

I'm sitting on a screened in porch. The sun is setting in the west, setting fire to the sky. It's a cool summer night. In the yard is a fire pit where orange-yellow flames flicker brightly. Taemin is playing around with Roo (Jonghyun's dog) in the yard by the fire, prancing around with the fireflies that are coming out to play. Minho is poking at the fire, setting new logs on top of it to burn brightly. A smile finds its way across his face as he looks up to see the young maknae running around and laughing with the little puppy. Across from me, sitting on top of the picnic table are Onew and Jonghyun. Onew is playing the guitar with care while Jonghyun closes his eyes, moving to the music. He lets the words of the song slip off his lips and float up into the starry night. Onew begins to sing the harmony. I'm watching the soft expression on his face, making my heart flutter. He glances up to see me looking and sends me a soft, welcoming smile. I bite my bottom lip and blush before turning away in embarrassment. My eyes now land on Key who is sitting to my left. He's smiling and swaying to the music. He gets up and crosses the patio to sit on the other side of Jonghyun. His voice soon joins the other two boys', giving my heart a feeling it's never felt before. Minho motions for giggling Taemin to come back up onto the porch with him. The two new voices blend perfectly as they climb the stairs and join their hyungs. Taemin hurries over and grabs my hand, pulling me to stand with the group. I look at each one, cherishing this beautiful moment, wishing it could last forever.

  

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~