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A Fangirl's Dream

*Brianna’s POV*

My eyes fluttered open and I found myself looking up at Key’s face. I shivered; my body felt unnaturally cold. Suddenly I realized I was in water, and I remembered where I was.

“Key, what happened?” I asked. “I remember you saying something about our futures and then everything went black.”

“Um, let’s go back to shore and we’ll talk,” he said awkwardly, which was not like Key at all.

“Okay…”

We swam back to shore in silence. I tried to remember what had happened because I knew from the atmosphere that it had been important, but Key might not be willing to discuss it again.

What had Key said that made me pass out? It was something about family… I think? Well he said something about me being young and- oh! He said he wanted to settle down with me. Wait… family… settle down…

We had just reached shore when it finally ALL hit me.

“Oh my gosh Key!” I stopped walking and stared at him in shock.

“I guess you remember now, huh?” he asked, stopping next to me but not looking at my face.

“Key,” I whispered, slipping my hand in his. “I’m sorry but… I can’t tell you that I want to marry you. I mean, yes if I could make that decision now I would, but I haven’t even begun to explore the world yet. I need to find out who I am. I want to go to college and become a nurse; a good nurse! That might lead me down other roads. There are so many things I haven’t experienced that could affect that kind of decision… it would change a lot of things.”

“Don’t be sorry,” he said, still not looking at me. I heard a sniffle come from him which tore at my heart. “I’m the one that should be apologizing.” He finally turned to look me in the eyes. “It was selfish of me to ask such a thing of you, especially now. I mean for goodness sakes you’re only eighteen! I’m just… afraid.”

“Afraid of what?” I asked. What the heck could this boy be afraid of? He was Almighty Key for goodness sakes!

“I’m afraid of losing you. Just the thought of us growing apart and you meeting someone new… I don’t think I could handle that. I want to be able to wake up every morning knowing that you are mine and always will be no matter what.”

“Kibum,” I placed a gentle hand on his cheek. “I don’t want to lose you either. It’s just that I don’t know if I can commit to something so serious right now. Maybe someday when I’m out of college and living on my own we’ll be able to discuss this again… on happier terms.”

“I understand; you need your time. I guess we BOTH still have some growing and searching to do. But, no matter where we go or what roads our lives lead us down, you’ll always be the reason for the beating in my heart.”

I embraced him in a tight hug, taking in every moment as a treasure. Memories from the last three months flooded my mind as his warm, wet body pressed against mine. I was going to miss his touch, his laugh, his smile, his voice -everything- so much.

 “I hope you’re at the end of my road Key.”

“Of course I’ll be there; waiting faithfully for you.”

We stood on the beach, hugging as if we’d never let go and had become the same person. In my heart it felt like that’s what we really were; one person. He whispered the most precious things in my ear while giving me little kisses on my cheeks, forehead and nose.

“Now how about we go get something to eat? That seafood place we passed on the way here looked pretty nice,” Key suggested, pulling away.

“Captain Crab’s?” I asked humorously as I recalled the little eatery’s lame attempt at a name.

“Why not? Then we’ll have something to laugh about on the ride home!”

I grabbed his arm and we began walking toward the empty parking lot where our car sat all alone.

“Alright Key… Key… Keywi! Haha, Kiwi! What would you do if I called you…” My voice faded out when he stopped and I saw the look on his face. “You won’t like that huh?” I asked his hard expression before looking down at the ground.

“Not from anyone but you… Banana!”

I looked up to see him laughing, instantly making me smile.

“We are so silly,” I laughed along with him as we walked the rest of the way to the car.

We joked around, enjoying ourselves on the ride to the eatery and during our meal. Though these were ending times for us, I was glad we were having so much fun. It’d be a wonderful memory to look back on. Though it was would bejust a memory…

 

 

 

*Ahhh guuuyyysss! I'm so excited to share the next few chapters!!!^.^ A lot of surprises and changes and excitement! I typed like five new ones today in my excitemnt; yes! On Easter Sunday! Hahaha; I hope you're enjoying reading it as much as I'm enjoying writing it!!! :D Saranghae and kamsahamnida!<3

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~