How It Really Feels

A Fangirl's Dream

*Nicole’s POV*

At first I was shocked by Minho’s sudden move on my lips. It had taken me totally by surprise. My response is what shocked me even more.

“Minho, don’t do this,” I said, turning my head to break the kiss.

“What’s wrong?” he asked.

“I don’t want you to just be another one night stand. You… I… I care about you.”

“Then don’t let it be,” he whispered, taking my face in his hands and kissing me.

I’d never felt someone kiss me like this. It was different from anything I’d ever experienced. It had meaning. Who knew that something as simple as pressing two sets of lips together could mean this much?

I felt his hands reach under me just before my body left the ground. He carried me over to my bed, setting me down gently before crawling over top of me. Never once did our lips break apart.

A tear slipped down my cheek as his tongue poked in my mouth. I didn’t bother fighting it. I let him explore every inch of my mouth as more tears fell from my eyes.

“Tears?” he questioned through the kiss.

He pulled away so we could both catch our breath.

“I’ve never felt something like this before,” I whispered. “I… I think I love you, Minho.”

“It’s crazy, but I think I love you too.” His expression was strange. It was blank but spoke a million words. It was solemn but shouted with joy.

“Minho, I’m… I’m scared.”

“Don’t worry,” he said as he kissed my neck. “I won’t let you fall.”

“Min…” I exhaled.

“I love you.”

Things began to slow down. Instead of lust and impatience, care was projected in his actions. He slipped off my shirt and began giving my stomach gentle kisses. I closed my eyes and searched for his hand. Our fingers intertwined, leaving my head spinning.

When the kisses stopped I opened my eyes. To my pleasure he was taking off his shirt, revealing his beautifully toned stomach. I sat up and ran my hand down his washboard abs. He smiled down at me while I kissed each one.

“Now, will you let me show you the right way to do this?” he asked, laying me back down on the bed.

I bit my lip and nodded, scared of what to expect.

Why am I scared? I’ve done this SO many times before. But this is different. It’s not for lust… it’s for love.

I closed my eyes, letting him take control.

“Do you trust me?” he whispered in my ear; his hot breath dancing on my neck.

“I-I trust you,” I nodded.

I held my breath as he slithered his hands down my body, and –when he got there- pulling my yoga pants down with them.

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Minho crashed down next to me on the bed. I reached for his hand and turned to look at him. Seeing his sweaty chest rising up and down next to me as he tried to catch his breath gave me butterflies.

“Thank you,” I whispered.

 He smiled and kissed our intertwined fingers. 

 

 

 

*Hey readers!!! So I'm totally excited! I was listening to the piano version of SHINee's "Hello" (the first SHINee song I ever listened to and fell in love with), and it hit me that its PERFECT for the opening credits for this fic! ....If it was a movie<3 Lol. When I write I zoon out and don't really notice I'm typing because I'm busy watching the movie in my mind. Anyway, I imagined an opening credits scene (putting in camera angles and everything. I didn't go as far as the lighting affects, but I know how I want them in my mind haha). I posted it in the foreword. Make sure to check it out! It's not writing super nicely; it's more of just to give you the idea and you let your own mind run with it. Mmmm I think it's my favorite part of the whole story(: Anyway, I hope you guys like it!!!! Let me know what you think<333

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~