Waiting Room

A Fangirl's Dream

*Minho’s POV*

I opened my eyes to see a white ceiling above me. My ears picked up on a steady beeping sound, but otherwise the room was silent. I lifted my head up groggily and looked around the room. The walls were white and I was surrounded by machinery foreign to me. I became conscious of an IV stuck in my hand.

Just then a nurse came walking through the door. She smiled when she saw me. “You’re awake!”

“What happ-,”

“Hold on honey. Let me get this mask off you,” she said, coming over and removing an oxygen mask from my face. “Now what was that?”

“Where am I?” My throat felt really scratchy and I immediately went into a coughing fit.

“Shhh, take it easy,” the nurse said calmingly, helping me sit up a little and putting a hand on my chest. “Do you want me to raise the bed a little?”

I just nodded and continued to cough. Soon the head of the bed was tilted up and I leaned against it so I was sitting upright.

“Thank you. So… what happened?” I managed in a whisper.

“Well for starters you have pneumonia, which is understandable considering you were found lying outside in the rain. When they brought you in you were burning up with a temperature of 104ºF. You gave us quite a scare, but we put you on oxygen and got your temperature down. Nobody’s quite sure how long you were out there, but one of the girls said you’d knocked on her door maybe two hours before someone found you. I’d ask what you were doing, but I don’t want you to start coughing again-,”

“Paige we need you in room five,” someone in a white uniform peaked in the doorway.

“Okay, I’ll be right there,” she sighed. She then turned to me and said, “You just rest up. I’ll be back in a little while to check up on you.” And with a quick smile she was out the door.

I exhaled and let my head lay back, closing my eyes. There was so much to take in. Had I really been out there in the rain for two hours?  Who was the one that found me? Nicole said I’d knocked on her door. She helped me, right? I then found myself asleep once again.

*Nicole’s POV*

I sat in the waiting room with the others, scrolling through my phone and trying to act like it was no big deal. Inside I was freaking out.

Why didn’t I open the door? Why didn’t I let him in? This wouldn’t have happened if I just let that babo talk to me, right? Gosh, there I go with the Korean again. I need to stop. I’m the old Nicole now. Minho means nothing he’s just another guy on the list- gosh Minho why are you doing this to me?! Please be okay! If anything happens to you…

“How are you doing?” I looked up to see Annie standing in front of me.

I just shrugged, not in the mood to talk. Instead of leaving, she sat down in the chair next to me.

“He’s going to be okay,” she told me.

I just shrugged again. “That’s good. He’ll be up and ready to go and break another girl’s heart. That’s just wonderful.” I didn’t take my eyes off my phone.

“Nicole-,”

“Will you just leave me alone? I don’t need you to help me. I’m fine,” I snapped.

She didn’t say a word, but got up and went back to sit with Jonghyun. I saw him wrap an arm around her and kiss her neck. If it had been yesterday I would’ve found that cute, but I was the old Nicole now. I just laughed to myself and went back to my texting. Every bit of me was crying to have a relationship like that, but I knew I’d be better off protecting my heart and having flings. Heartbreak was something I never wanted to go through again.

*Taemin’s POV*

“Hyung,” I whispered to Onew who was sitting across from me. He was holding Rebecca in his arms, wiping away her tears. She was the one that found Minho lying out there in the rain. She was still convinced that this whole mess was her fault, so she was taking this all pretty badly.

“Yes Taemin-ah?” Onew asked, lifting up his head which had been resting against Rebecca’s.

“Do you think this will hurt his voice? Will he still be able to sing?”

“I’m sure he’ll be fine,” Onew gave me a weak smile. “He’s just got some water in his lungs.”

“What if he doesn’t get better though? What if he’ll never be able to sing again and SHINee becomes four? What’s going to-,”

“It’ll be all my fault,” Rebecca’s voice squeaked from Onew arms, her face buried in his chest. “I’ve ruined SHINee.”

“Shhh, no you’ve done nothing of the sort,” Onew comforted her, petting her hair. He looked up at me as if to say Don’t-Say-Anything-More-We’ll-Talk-Later.

I sighed and slipped my hand into Carolyn’s who was sitting next to me. She smiled and gave me a soft kiss on the cheek.

“He’ll be okay,” she reassured me.

“What the heck happened?!” We all turned to see the manager standing in the doorway of the waiting room.

“Sir, please keep your voice down,” the lady at the desk advised him. He just shrugged her off and walked over to us.

“I left you guys for three days for business, and now I get back to find Minho in the hospital? And what’s this I hear about a fight?” the manager questioned, staring at us in disappointment and disbelief.

“It’s not as bad as it sounds,” Onew said, looking up at him.

“Why is Rebecca crying- and what happened to her eye?!” he asked when Rebecca turned to look at him.

“Well she kind of got in the way during the fight, and she’s just upset about Minho,” Onew explained, rubbing his hand over back comfortingly. “But everything will be okay.”

“Aigoo, you guys! You realize we’re going to have to stay until Minho is strong enough to travel. You have schedules to keep back in Korea! Interviews, CFs, photo shoots… this is going to throw everything off!”

“But, that means we’ll have a few extra days together right?” Key piped up, smiling at Brianna.

“No,” the manager stated firmly. “The girls will still be leaving tomorrow. You boys will have to stay in a hotel because our time in the mansion will be up. You’ll need to practice your singing and dancing every day, just like you would if we were back in Seoul. Vacation is over.”

I looked down at the ground in sadness. This was definitely NOT the reality that I wanted.   

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~