Title:
The title gives off a bit of a horror kind of vibe and I like that since horror happens to be my favorite genre. I saw that some dark stuff would be going on and I think the title (and the damn poster) are perfect for that dark vibe. The title and poster both grabbed my attention immediately so I think you presented these things very well. After reading the end of chapter one, I love how the title connects to something in the story. It makes it a much better and stronger title.

Description/Foreword:
First of all the description is very neat and tidy and I can appreciate that. Second of all, I love the description as a whole. It doesn't give too much of the story away, if anything at all, and I feel very compelled to read it because of that aspect. Not only that, but I love the Shakespeare quote because it fits the story quite well so good job choosing that one out. I feel like these two things were thought out very well and I'm interested to see what the story reveals.

Plot:
"Everyone is their own harshest critic, after all." This stood out to me because of how true it is. I am so harsh on myself with writing and I don't ever feel 100% satisfied so I related to this very well. 

Moving on though, the plot is well thought out (yes, I say this a lot because it's very true) and I think it's far from cliché or boring, the way you write is very intriguing and I felt very immersed in the world you've written in this story. I feel like Donghae's PTSD is going to play a very big part in this story and I can't wait to see how the relationship between Eunhyuk and Donghae is going to progress even moreso that it's slowburn which I can fully appreciate.

The conflict here is quite obvious, which is good, and I can't wait to see how it's solved at the end of the story and if it will be solved. I do expect some plot twists here and there (even if I don't get plot twists, the story will be good either way). I'm personally very curious to what happened to make Donghae suffer from PTSD and I'm sure it'll be revealed at later chapters or hinted at which I look forward to as well. Either way, I can't wait to see how the story develops over time and how Donghae will react to meeting Eunhyuk.

Writing Style/Flow:
Four words: this is well written. Like holy , the writing and descriptions of things is very detailed and astounding and I'm quite impressed to say the least. There's feeling to what is written here and I feel as if I'm actually feeling what the main character is (which I'm not sure is a good thing or not yet) but damn, this is very well thought out and I can tell. And if it's not then why are you still on AFF, go write a book child (I call everyone child, please don't mind me). No you know what, get off AFF and write a book child, I'd buy it if this is what's happening. This is honestly book material, it sounds professional, looks professional, and has perfect usage of words. That poster is good enough to BE a book cover too, like stop it (don't stop it, please).

Before I just go on and on about how I'm yes over everything; the flow is quite good. I think it's good that nothing is rushed and that Eunhyuk hasn't showed up in the first chapter; slowburn is more realistic and is better for a more enhancing story. So, in other words, the flow is set at the right pace. It's not too fast, confusing, or unrealistic. This is quite realistic sounding and I could see this happening though, for some reason, the story sounds as if it were based in the earlier times like the 1970's or 1980's - maybe earlier than that. But that's just me. There were no grammatical errors that I could see so that aspect is quite good too.

The dialogue was very natural sounding and not fake, I could imagine two people having that kind of conversation face-to-face which is good, while stories are ficition, some go a bit overboard with the dialogue and force it but this sounds quite natural and smooth.

The amount of description added to things is unbelievable really, I usually review fanfics that don't have as much detail as this one does and that's why I'm just impressed. Like honestly, I have troubles being thorough with details on my stories and reading this makes me just go "the ," (in a good way) and it kind of makes me determined to improve my own writing as a fanfic writer. So really, I'll be looking forward to the rest of the story.

Characterization:
For Donghae, I like his character. The way you've described him is very well and I feel as if I can picture everything. Not only that but I feel as if the reader can also feel what he's going through and his struggles. As a main character, he is very strong and I'm looking forward to seeing what else you do with him. I like that Donghae doesn't think highly of himself and refuses to call himself an artist, it brings more realism to him because not everyone thinks they're hot , even if they're a good artist. He's not overly cliché as a character and despite SUJU being one of the first boy bands I found in K-pop years back, I don't think I can say I know much about them as a whole (minus Heechul since I love that man) so I think it's interesting to read a fanfic where he's not a playboy (I've seen many EunHae fanfics like that), his character is very memorable - and by that, I mean he will be remembered even after the story comes to an end.

For Siwon, he's harder to talk about as the story is focused on Donghae but he's the support character EVERY main character should have in this situation. The way you made his character seems to fit him very well and I think there's potential in his character and the role he will play as the chapters go on. He seems to want the best for Donghae but at the same time, he's there for the money and so on. If that makes sense. As a support character, he fits the role very well.

Overall, the characterization is very good and neither are overly cliché. As Eunhyuk hasn't been introduced yet, I can't say much but who knows, maybe I will after the next chapter comes out (if I don't forget to leave comments, that is).

Personal Enjoyment:
I would yell at you more (in a good way) but I am a professional adult, I swear (not really). I honestly love this and you can bet your I'm putting it on the featured stories list. I do remember reading a different story of yours and that one was good as well but this is my favorite out of the two.

As I said before, I'll be looking forward to reading and waiting for the rest of the updates; this story is quite up my league and I think it deserves good recognition. Now I should probably go back to studying for my exam that started today and ends Wed. (bless online college) but hey, reading this was worth the lost time.

Either way, don't forget to credit the shop and I look forward to the next chapters!