Notes From Reviewer

Title 

The title Impossible Sun is pretty unique in the sense that it's not a usual cliche title everyone happens to use. It makes people wonder, or at least me, why the title is "Impossible Sun" so maybe it would make me want to read more. Whether the title connects to the story though is a different story.

Description & Foreword 

The one thing I wasn't fond of was the text font, it seemed quite unprofessional (not saying that we're all professionals here but I usually consider the georgia, lucida grande, etc. kind of fonts to fit better than the weird looking big ones. Besides that, I really like the description. The story seems interesting and you didn't give a whole lot away on what it'll be about.

Plot

The first thing I noticed were the names of the chapters. I really liked them, they seemed creative (most of them, not all). My favorite is "Whispers Of Wonders" and I SEE WHAT YOU DID. I don't know if you did this on purpose but every other chapter beings with "Being ____" If you did that on purpose, that's clever. I almost missed it honestly. (This has nothing to do with the plot excuse me).

For the plot, personally the description made it sound really exciting but for a reader like me, it wasn't really that exciting. I'm also a very strict reader on what I read so this can also play a part in this factor but for me, the plot wasn't exciting.

Writing Style 

The first line of the first chapter does have a small typo and some weird grammar.
"If Taehyung was to describe his thoughts after watching the curtains of the window opposites his were drawn aside..."
This sounds really weird. 
"If Taehyung was were to describe his thoughts after watching the curtains of the window opposites his opposite of him were drawn aside..."
Sounds much better.

Honestly seems like the main focus should be grammar. There's some sentences with words missing so it sounds funky. I understand that English may not be your first language (or maybe it is) but the grammar does need to be polished a bit.

Characterization 

So far the characters don't really seem special to me. They seem kind of generic but since this isn't a finished story, you could put a plot twist in and I wouldn't really know (plus I didn't read all the chapters due to lack of time and sleep - I can't keep my focus on for too long) but they're not completely cliche characters which is always good.

Flow 

The flow is okay but when it comes to flow of "grammar", it's not the best. Mistakes happen, they definitely do happen (they happen to me a lot), but if you have someone who could maybe proofread the chapters (some people do this) then maybe it'll be okay?

Personal Enjoyment 

Not my cup of tea since all I read are Taegi fanfics honestly (I'm super picky with my fanfics please excuse me) but I mean the idea is there. I'm sorry if I missed anything I'm still recovering from MAMA (it started at 3AM for me and I havent really slept since) so if you need me to clarify anything lemme at 'em.