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review

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a letter to oh sehun
story link: here

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author
noonayoung

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reviewer
vecember

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overall mark
??/100

TITLE.
honestly with a title like this i thought "one of these huh" because the title is very very generic. i've seen titles like this before and it's not something i'd ever want to click on but when you read what's inside, it really makes you think. it's different within from most of these "love" letter types and it definitely goes with the quote "never judge a book by it's cover"

DEscription/foreword.
for the description, i kind of just.. eh. i've always hated character descriptions in stories because it's just not needed. stories don't need character profiles. you don't really need those things there because we find out that sehun takes over the company within the letter. we find out that the female has a complicated life & takes on the job within the letter. so there's no need for them. this is just my opinion but i personally didn't look at these until after i read because i didn't want anything given to me.

PLOT.
i didn't expect such heavy topics when i saw the title. i figured it would be some cliche love letter. When the topic came up, i was quite shocked. it's surely not a topic many people like to bring up, in real life or even in stories, so i think you took a pretty big risk with it. the pregnancy was to be expected afterwards and the abortion thing was also a heavy topic. i really wasn't expecting such a heavy story. 

the one thing i did like though is that even though the main character struggled, even though bad things happened to her, she moved on with her life. she is marrying someone else, she even told sehun to live life to the fullest. that shows maturity.

WRITING STYLE/FLOW.
at some parts, i feel like too many things were added in to make it more "dramatic" but honestly, it worked anyways. writing a letter fic isn't easy, personally i think writing letters are boring but putting it into a fanfic that's enjoyable is hard. same with journal!au's where the main character is keeping a journal of some sort. even i wanted to do a journal fanfic (i even wrote it in a physical notebook) but making a plot for something like that is very difficult.

when it comes to grammar, there are very minor mistakes. i forgot where it was but i noticed you missed a word somewhere which made the sentence sound quite awkward.

CHARACTERIZATION.
the main character, as i said above, really does show maturity. it probably takes a lot to recover from a scenario like that, and aborting a child is never easy and takes a lot to push through but the main character did it and it can show a lot. even if she wanted to commit suicide, someone always stopped her and she never ended up doing it. but besides this, the characterization was probably the weakest point of the story which is to be expected because it's a letter. a letter isn't really supposed to show much of characterization.

PERSONAL ENJOYMENT + notes.
i didn't mind reading this, i do like letter/journal!au fanfics because they are like you're reading someone else's life story through their perspective and i ike that aspect. makes me really want to write my own actually, haha. so overall, i did enjoy it. :)

if you ever need any more requests, i'm here for you, i'm glad i reviewed these stories and i did see improvement from each one i read. sure some still had mistakes but this and the last one really show how much you've improved in my opinion.