Title (5/5):
The title is quite long, I was literally like "hot damn" when I saw it. I'm a bigger fan of shorter titles personally but looking pas that aspect, I do think the title is fairly eye-catching. I mean, It's easy to notice as the title is long which is good. I can tell from the first few sentences of the story that it can relate since stars are mentioned off the bat. Plus I feel like the title is relatable since I'm 1000% a hopeless dreamer.

Description/Foreword (10/10):
I like the description because it's short and simple, honestly. It clarifies who the "hopeless dreamer" is from the title as well since it says she is a dreamer who wants to touch something unattainable. I like how it doesn't give much of the story away either and I think with a description like that, it can be quite captivating. I'm not the biggest fan of pictures in the foreword but it's not excessive so I won't make much comments about it since it's not a big deal.

Plot (38/40):
I think it's clever how you used stars and corellations and all that jazz in the chapters because it really brought out the vibe of the story. I wasn't expecting there to be connections to them so that was a nice touch you added in to further show Irene's character. Since this story is only three chapters long, I feel like I don't really know what the plot's conflict is and that's fine, sometimes it's not clear until later but what needs to be resolved is the main question I'm wondering. Maybe it went over my head but I didn't see much of a conflict that needed to be solved nor do I know your plans for the future with this story. I think for what it is, it's a good story especially if you're into this ship. 

I'm trying to find more to say but my brain is lost, I think, whoops. Anyways, since the story really isn't that long right now in general, length wise included, I think it's harder to say but from what I can see, the story is headed in the right direction as I've said before. You seem to have an idea in your head and I think you're executing it fairly well.

Writing Style/Flow (13/20):
Basing it off of the description, I did think the story was going to be in third point of view and was slightly disappointed to open the first chapter since it was in first point of view instead. I've never been a fan of fanfictions in the first point of view because of a few reasons. For one, I feel like it's easier to read in third point of view and more room for detail is there. First point of view, usually (judging by other fanfics), is very scattered and sometimes, sadly, can be very poorly written which is why I think third is easier to be with. I know some people aren't comfortable with writing in third, I wasn't for awhile, but it suits my reading/writing style more. 

Anyways, moving on, there wasn't much grammar problems overall. There were some minor things such as: "I bit my bottom lips, feeling the heat rose inside me." It would be: "I bit my bottom lip, feeling the heat rise inside of me." Because you only have one bottom lip, not bottom lips which indicate you have two bottom lips. 

Moving on to flow, I feel like the story is lacking with the flow a bit. I don't feel like I know much of what's happening honestly. Whether that be because I'm sleepy right now or not, I don't know, but the story seems a little loose on details here and there. I feel like more detail might work to really develop the story as a whole.

Characterization (19/20):
I feel like this section can be hard with stories that aren't third point of view solely for the fact that it's in one character's point of view, which isn't always a bad thing, but I feel like I only know Irene as a character so far which is fine considering the chapter count right now. There's definitely more to learn about each character in upcoming chapters so I'm really not worried about this section much. I think you got your characters down good so far and I think you'll be fine overall.

Personal Enjoyment (4/5):
I'm personally not a fan of this band at all so I feel like I wouldn't be one to read it on my own, especially because it's first point of view, but it's not a bad story. I think you have it down and the story seems to be headed in a fairly good direction. Again, I liked the star stuff such as Orion and yeah, that stuff was a nice touch to the story's plot and all. 

Sorry I didn't write as long of a reviews but with shorter fanfics, it's harder to criticize everything (that and I think I am half asleep?) but regardless, with good stories there's really not much to critique anyways since... they're good. Not much to critique when it's good. :p

Total (89/100):
Overall, I'd say the score isn't that bad and I think the story is headed in the right direction as I said before, it's not a story for me since I don't read fanfics from bands I don't like but that's okay, the story is good and it seems to be getting recognition which is fairly well deserved.

Also, knowing me, I probably forgot to mention or say something else but if you have any questions, let me know! (I really need to stop doing reviews at three in the morning, excuse me).