Notes From Reviewer

Title 

Heartfelt Voice is a nice title and it's actually revelant to the story itself. The title is obviously a reference to the 'blonde male' she keeps hearing and I think the idea is interesting. It's like he's the voice only she can hear that tries to guide her in the right way. Overall, I like the title and there's not much else to put to it. Though, I checked the rest of your stories and they all have quite unique titles so kudos to you.

Description & Foreword 

Clean, enticing, captivating. Three good words to describe how I feel about the layout and the words actually written within it. Usually the pictures make it ugly since some people go overboard but I like what you did with the .gif and the words next to it. As for the legitimate description of the story, that's damn capitivating; short and simple. It's like a poem. Like in lines 3 & 4, hear and fear are rhymes and personally, it makes me want to read more of the story itself even if I'm not one to read fanfics like that. 

Plot

The plot is quite good and alluring and although the plot can be considered cliche, you took the idea of having an 'inner voice' or 'inner demon' in your head that ruins your life and twisted it to make it your own and I like that - we need more things like that instead of the same ideas being thrown into various stories with different characters and settings. The plot itself, if graded, would be maybe a 7 out of a 10 but with your twist to it, it'd be above a 10. 

Writing Style 

Give me more is all I'm gonna say. I've steered away from AFF for so, so, long because I feel like the writing here is "walmart" compared to other places which I would consider "gucci" if you get my comparison but seeing this good type of writing on here makes me gain some faith. My real opinion to you would be to get off this website and write a real book, you have the potential to be a real author with your ideas, titles, writing style, all of that. I think you could really do an all-kill in the writing industry if you had a solid idea for a novel. As far as any grammatical errors, I didn't find anything so good job on that, too.

Characterization 

With two chapters you can't always get a firm grip on the characters and who they are but from what we know, Jiyeon is a school teacher who is quite young and teaches math (everyone's favorite subject - sarcasm definitely intended) who has this voice in her head that sometimes boggles her mind. Her mother, a nice woman, seems to be an important character considering she's forcing her into seeing someone for help. Yoona seems like her part can definitely create some further progress in the plot and so far, everyone seems perfectly normal. There's no Mary Sue's or some cliched teen that has everything which makes the story more promising. 

Flow 

Flow is on point as the kids say, I liked it, nothing felt rushed. Everything was understandable for most people and I think that you have something good going on.

Personal Enjoyment 

I enjoyed it, honestly. After two years of not doing this, it's good to have this as a refresher so thank you for that. I do think that you should become a real author one day, I honestly think you have the potential to do something amazing and I know the writing industry is a tough competition but you have that talent there someplace.