Title 4/5 – This title is really well, unique. I had to translate what this title meant, which lead me to “Black and White.” I'm not quite sure if that's what you were going for, but it's really relevant though. It represents how Shin Hye can only see shades of grey and how Yonghwa can see technicolor. Which is like the difference between black and white. The only thing I didn't like was that, if I didn't translate the title, I would be confused on what it meant. I also wouldn't find it eye-catching. Also, the title doesn't give much information about the story, unless you translate it yet again. Just a suggestion, to make the title more eye-catching–I suggest to add the accent marks in “Noir”.

Foreword 8/10 – The foreword is really good and emotional. I like how you rainbow-colored the colour and technicolour. The metaphor you put in your foreword, is really deep, and easy to understand. I suggest possibly advancing on how you describe your characters, it's too plain. I feel like, you could do so much more with your foreword though. You could have added much more emotions and mysterious. Periods are not only for ending a sentence, but they can highlight a sentence as well. Also, I noticed that you use the British way of saying colour and grey, I suggest adding a possible authors note at the bottom–since there are some inexperience readers/writers who would assume you spelled color wrong. They bring a mysterious vibe if used correctly, such as...

❁ “In a world of black-and-white, to see in colour is a cardinal sin. For a girl who could only see the world in shades of grey, and a boy who could only see it in technicolour, how different would their two worlds be?” should be,”

“In a world of black-and-white...

To see in a colour...

Is a cardinal sin.

A girl who could only see the world in shades of gray...

And a boy who could only see it in technicolour,

How different could their two worlds be?”

Plot 18/20– I don't know why, but the idea of ten citizens being nominated to be tested, reminds me a lot of the Hunger Games. The story begins with a really good introduction. You described what was happening to the world currently, and you gave us a glimpse of what the “chromatic anomalies” feel about The Great Undoing. When I read about Yonghwa confessing to Shinhye, I was like, not another wishy-washy couple...but then you literally blew my mind away with that twist at the end! I would never have guessed that Shinhye was going to be part of the Society. Also, I was really like emotionally happy that Yonghwa made Shinhye a chromatic anomalies. I can't wait for the sequel! I really wonder though, why did the world government ban seeing colour in the first place? What do the chromatic abnormalities really feel about this Society of Black and White?

Grammar and Spelling 18/20– Your word-choices excel most of the asianfanfic population. I was really blown away by how detailed you write. Your writing style is really good, well, I really prefer these types of stories. You write in a way that makes the readers cling to the story. They want to keep reading and figure out all the secrets. You have a really small amount of errors. I noticed that you do a really good job staying away from run-off sentences, and even if you have a long sentence, you know how to connect them with commas. A few spelling and grammar errors here and there, but hey, no one can be perfect. I tweaked some of your important sentences to add a little more emotion and to make the readers feel more entranced into the story...

❁ “There were two doors leading to the room. One led to the common corridor, while the other led to a second room, whose occupants were hidden from view behind a one-way mirrored panel, not unlike the sort you would find in police interrogation rooms. Right now there was only one man seated in room, facing a huge projector screen.” should be,”There were two doors that lead to a room. One led to the center corridor, while the other one led to another room, where occupants are hidden from view behind a one-way mirrored panel, like the sort you would find in a police interrogation room. Currently in that room, there was only one man who was facing a huge projector screen.”

❁ “...to assess their abilities to see the dreaded 'colour'...These tests involved identification of a series of pictures, and typically also included ordering of objects according to their shades of grey, all done while the test subject was hooked up to a supercomputer via a number of electrodes. The supercomputer would then analyse whether or not the subject was telling the truth...Almost everyone passed the test, but every once in a while the computer would pick out a rare chromatic anomaly.” should be,”...to assess their abilities to see the dreaded 'colour'...These tests involve the identification of a series of pictures, and typically they also include the ordering of objects according to their shades of grey, all done while the test subject is hooked up to a supercomputer via a number of electrodes. The supercomputer would then analyze whether or not the subject was telling the truth...Almost everyone passes this test, but every once in a while–the computer would pick out a rare chromatic anomaly.”

Characters 20/20– The way Yonghwa and Shinhye fell in love is like, how should I say it, way too fast. The way you added that twist with Shinhye being a Society agent. Good Job. My mouth literally fell when I read it. Just when I thought the couple was gonna be a wishy-washy type, you drew me right back into the story. I really liked how you emphasized that Yonghwa was a person who could see colour, and he was surrounded by people who worked for the society. I really liked how you brought Minhyuk's character to life (To be honest, I literally screamed when I saw Minhyuk's name. He's like, one of the most cutest idols I know.)

Flow 14/15– The flow was really easy-to-understand and normal-paced. The only part where I didn't like was that you really rushed the whole idea where Yonghwa is thinking back on how he met Shinhye, and how Yonghwa proposed to Shinhye. Then again, those weren't like, the main events in the story. Also, your conclusion was really well organized. You made sure the readers were still astonished by the fact Shinhye was a Society member, and then you put in the fact that Shinhye was now a chromatic abnormality like Yonghwa.

Enjoyment 5/5– I definitely enjoyed this story. It was like so full of cliffhangers and twist! It really made my adrenaline rush. My mouth was literally dropped to the ground when I found out Shinhye was a Society member. Also, I can't wait for the sequel! I really want to know what happened after Shinhye found out that she was able to see colour. I really enjoyed how everyone was like, revolved against The Great Undoing. I feel like that's going to be the main antagonist of the story. //Just for my own enjoyment, I really wonder how Minhyuk is going to be involved in the story.

Structure 4/5– The paragraph spacings are a bit too wide-spread. There are some too big and some too small. I don't know if you're trying to emphasize a sentence but I guess it's up to your choice. Also, the font is not too big or too small. The way you color font the word “colour” is really creative btw.

Overall 91/100 – This story is one of the most unique I've ever read. It's so amazingly detailed and not mary-sue at all! It's filled with so many cliffhangers and twists. I really enjoyed how you ended the story, how Shinhye ended up being a Society member and betraying Yonghwa. Finally, how Shinhye ended up being a chromatic abnormality and she can see colour now. I really can't wait for the sequel! I hope I'll be able to review that one as well! :)

Reply: Thanks so much for the detailed review! Really appreciate the feedback :) I'll be sure to come back with the sequel!