★— saranghae-29223
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Angel
title: 3/5
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A little cliche.
foreword and description: 5/10
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It revealed too much.
appearance: 5/5
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The poster fit the theme well.
plot: 12/15
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It was very cliche. (but hey, I'm just happy someone wrote about Chen. ;D)
originality: 12/15
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grammar and spelling: 17/20
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In the second sentence of the story, you typed, "...lay down" when it's suppose to be "laid down" because it seems you're writing in past tense.
I suggest you don't use "~" when writing. I used to do that, but in real life, they don't happen so don't use the little waves. X3
flow: 7/10
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It was just literally one event after another. Very choppy. Lengthen the events out a little more.
characterization: 8/10
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I think the characters needed to be more developed. It was mostly about story line.
overall enjoyment: 7/10
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It wouldn't have caught my attention at first sight.
total: 76/100
reviewer: rlab_exotic
reviewer's note: Sorry if I sounded harsh...And sorry that my feedback was super short. >.<
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