Title : 3/5

it's not a very catchy title. But it really fit the theme of the story

Foreword and Description : 7/10

The foreword is nice. I like the extract you've chosen to put there. It makes me itrigued by you fanfiction.

Appearance : 3/5

The only complain I have is the poster ... you should get a bigger image cause it's a little blurred and you can see all the pixels.

Plot : 13/15

The plot is good. Some points are a little predictable but allover it's a good story

Originality : 14/15

the story is really nice.

Grammar and Spelling : 18/20

Your english is very good. There are only a couple of tiping mistakes and some sentences that doesn't sound really good.

Flow : 9/10

Characterization : 9/10 

the characters are good, even though you don't describe them in the foreword you can easily understand their personality while you're reading.

Overall Enjoyment : 10/10

I really liked your story :D I'm not so much into oneshot but your was really nice !:D ahaha maybe i liked it a lot cause i study near the departement of informatics... well it was a cute story :D

Total : 86/100

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E.G.'s notes!

hi! i'm E.G.! i'm here to remind you of crediting the shop and the reviewer. i'll keep an eye on your stories! /mehrong

thanks for requesting! :)