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DAHEPHAPZICO
special girl
title: 2/5
I'm not that impressed about it. It's simple and cute but it's pretty common. First look on it, it is fluff which I think is not suitable for the genre of the story.
foreword/description: 6/10
Descriptive enough for the characters but you should have put more details on the foreword. Hoya's statement seems incomplete but for me, I like it. It makes me read the story wondering why he said that. XD
appearance: 2/5
It's plain and simple but appearance is a part of enjoying in reading. Maybe put a simple background and main image.
plot: 15/15
I love it. For me, I love this kind of plots. I want to cry. It's very relatable (awesome!) You made an excellent one! :D
originality: 13/15
There are a lot of stories which is about the girl has cancer and she likes this boy and a fan that wants to see her idol but I would like to give you a high score. Even though its that common, you gave your own best on it.
grammar and spelling: 17/20
You shouldn't start the sentence with 'but' because its a conjunction. It will become a phrase not a sentence. There are few mistakes on spelling but it didn't affect much so it's fine.
flow: 8/10
It's a one-shot so what you did is well done! Although, I'm a bit diappointed (as a reader) when she died. She didn't even get to say goodbye personally but that's how you wanted it and it was wonderful. It touched my heart. :'')
characterization: 9/10
All of the cast were fit for the character! Job well done!
overall enjoyment: 8/10
I enjoyed reading it :) The things you need to watch: spelling, grammar, appearance, title and sentence.
total: 80/100
notes: Here is your review! I feel lucky to review your story. TROLOLOL. I hope I helped you! :)
reviewer: PreciousSerenity
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