Title : 5/5

The title is nice.

Foreword/Description : 6/10

The description of the characters with photos is very nice and help to get to know them. I would have written a summary of the plot in the description, because if you only put an extract from Jiyeon's pov it's a little confusing.

Appearance : 5/5

The poster and the backgorund are lovely and releated to the story.

Plot : 13/15

As i said before i would add a summary of the plot, just to give the reader a hint on what will be the main theme of this story. There are a lot of story that talks about high school's life so you have to show to the readers that yours has “that something more “ that will catch their attention and get them to stat read it.

Originality : 10/15

Unfortunately for you a lot of people write about shool life and tranferred students.

Grammar : 17/20

Your english is good I only found some forgetfulness or little grammar mistakes. Here there are my suggestions:

(Ch 1)

He's Kingka

He's the Kingka

(Ch 2)

She said its he hasn't found “the righ girl”.

She said it's he hasn't found “the righ girl”.
 

But yet is single and always has been.

But yet he is single and always has been. [if i remember correct in english is always better to specify the subject … ]

(...) and whoever wins, goes up a step and finally to the national level. [i get what you want to say but i think you should say it in a more correct way]

(...) and whoever wins, is a little closer to the finals that are at a national level [it's only a suggestion you can find even better way to say it :D]
 

I saw that use use a lot of emoticons like: =_= . It's okay to use them but pay attention to not to use them too much.

I mean EXO dance

I mean EXO's dance
 

Kai, (...), wa the best among all.

Kai, (...), wa the best among them all.

Characterization : 9/10

The characters are okay.

Flow : 10/10

No complains about it.

Overall Enjoyment : 9/10

I like your story :D the main character (Jiyeon) is fresh. And I'm curious on what will happend cause for the moment we've got to know only 2 characters: Jiyeon and Hara. So I'm looking forward to know better IU, Baekhyun and Myungsoo. [I mean, Jiyeon has described a lot Baekhyun, but it'll be interenting to see him interact a little more with her,Myungsoo and Hara in the future :) ]
So I think it's a good start! Keep writing I want to know what will happen now that “angelic-boy” Myungsoo finally appeared .

Total : 78/100

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