Title: 4/5

It isn't that cliché, but not that catchy as well.

Foreword/Description: 6/10

You did too many strikethroughs and if you don't want to lose the mood of the story, don't put character names like "Hwang _____" or "Ms. _____". Not counting that, the foreword should be pretty neat (without the flaws I've pointed out).

Appearrance: 5/5

The font colors and sizes are just perfect. Keep it up ;)

Plot: 11/15

It's not a good idea to ask for a review at the beginning of the story, as people might not understand the story. But anyways, your story is interesting!

Originality: 13/15

One-sided love stories are common but this is my first time reading a love square fic.

Grammar: 12/20

There must be at least half a dozen (or maybe even a dozen) of spelling errors. I'll recap some.

Original: the loud noise of your brothers calling you echo the whole house. You're in a deep sleep that you didn't bother to move.

Instead, use this: Your brothers banged on your door loudly but it's useless since you won't even move a second.

Original: "They think that wound scare me." You mumble and collapse back to your bed.

Instead, use this: "So they think I'm afraid of wounds," You mumbled as you threw yourself back onto your bed.

Original: "Urrrggggg!!!!" you shot up angrily and goes to open the door and quickly got back to your bed.

Instead, use this: "Ugh!" You growled as you made your way to open the door, but you dashed back onto your bed.

Characterization: 9/10

I like how you described your characters but again, too many strikethroughs.

Flow: 7/10

I enjoyed it at first but there are dragging (boring) scenes.

Total: 67/100

SOOshified's note. Your review's done! Sorry if it's late, honestly, I just noticed it tonight *facepalm* but at least I finished it, right? I hope I didn't offend you~

thederpchanyeol's note. here's your review! thanks for requesting! use this link when putting the review on your foreword. don't forget to credit the shop and the reviewer! :)