Username: AshleyFang

Story Title (&link): The Next Husband

Main Characters (+pairings): Myungsoo, Woohyun

Genre(s): Romance, MPREG

Current Length (No. of Chapters): 17

Rated?: No

Reviewer: SerialSleeper

_______________ ✦일부분 일; part one; the beginning. ✦_______________

Title;  3/5

I liked how the title describes the plot of the story well, though it’s not what I really consider as an ‘eye catching’ title. I’ve seen stories with a similar title like yours so I hope next time you can come up with a more interesting one.

Poster/Background;  4/5

I really liked the pictures that were used because it portraits Myungsoo and Woohyun's personalities. I liked how the color mixed well with the pictures as well though I feel like the poser is missing something. 

Description & Foreword;  7/10

I thought that you put a bit more information than needed to your description. Basically, I thought that it tells us the whole plot already which makes the excitement vanish when reading the story since we know what to expect and whatnot. I suggest that next time, make it more mysterious so the readers can be curious and have the urge to keep reading. 

______________ ✦두 번째 부분; the second part; the seam.✦______________

Creativity/Originality;  3/5

I've seen stories with a plot like this so I think that it's a little overused. Even though that's the case, I liked how you made this more interesing and adding the twist at the end.

Plot;  17/20

Like I said above, the plot of the story have been used by many already. Arrange marriage. Bad guy falling for the innocent one, though I liked how you managed to make their characters more charming.

Grammar;   12/15

I saw some spelling and grammar mistakes here and there which can be easily fixed by the more you write. 
Original: "Myungie, you should rest now because I want you to meet your husband-to-be." Told the mother and Myungsoo's face changed.
Correction: "Myungie, you should rest now because I want you to meet your soon to be husband." Mrs. Kim said, making Myungsoo's expression change.
I suggest when you're tlaking about their parents, use "Mr. and Mrs." so it would look nicer to read.

Characterization;   13/15

I thought that the characters are a bit cliche, though I liked how you made their personalities more pleasing to read.

_______________ ✦일부분 삼; part three; the little things. ✦_______________

Chapter Titles;  3/5

The chapter titles are simple and straight to the point, though I wished that you made it more interesting so the readers will get that feeling of excitement while reading the chapter.

Flow;  7/10

I really think that the flow is a bit rushed. Like you just want to end the chapter and move on. The events that happened to them are a bit cliche but I also liked the twist at the end. It made the story even better.

Writing Style (format + your style);  7/10

Your writing style is ismple and unique in some way thought I wished that you wrote strnoger words so the readers will be more excited on reading the story. Also, you tell but don't show. I noticed that sometimes you just narrate what's happening but don't really show their emotions and what they're doing.

Extra & Notes; Hey! Sorry if I was a bit harsh, i'm just trying to help you improve your writing. I like your story and I hope to see more stories from you in the future! 

Total Score; 76 ♡