Username: 

annie1017
 
Fanfiction name: 

Kids In Love 

Characters in story: 

Minho, Taemin, other SHINee members
 
Story title: 

Kids In Love
 
Story theme: 

romance, adventure
 

Title: 3/5

When first reading the title, I am curious. I know that it must be about younger characters in love, or presumably younger kinds – by that I mean people consider them foolish and young.

After reading the story, I realized that these two boys are just kids in love, like the title says, which is kind of cliché…I guess you could say. But I could automatically think of worse titles that are far more cliché than that. So, keep the title as is. It does fit with the story and does give some sense of what you are about to read.

Curiosity wise, I think you could do better because some readers have read stories about ‘kids in love’ before and they might not want to click because they assume it is just another romance between younger people.

Poster/Background: 5/10

The poster is simple and I like it. This is a 2min fic, so it only shows these two characters, which pleases me. Though, I know it could be more professional, I think it is simple and neat.

Description: 4.5/5

I really enjoy the description. It pulls me in, not giving too much away. I like the beginning of it where you state : 4 Places. 3 Words. 2 Boys. 1 Summer. I really like that. It gives some mystery about it and makes me want to know what else happens in it.

The only reason I didn’t give a perfect 5/5 is because I am someone who wants a cliffhanger along with the sense of wanting to know what else happens. You have one of those. I think it would benefit if there was some sort of question ending the description.

Foreword: 2.5/5

The foreword was kind of confusing, even though I realized it was talking about the story and what happens that summer. It gives away some detail as to what happens and leaves us thinking ‘I want to read more’, but to me, it was slightly confusing.

It is also short in my opinion. The Foreword can be used in many ways, sometimes not even used at all and I’m glad you at least put something there. Though your words put there are good, I just feel maybe adding something could help.

Chapter Names: 4/5

The chapter names fit well with each chapter, so you did well with that. :)

Characterization: 13/15

You did characterize people well. You described their looks throughout the story and showed who they were. You helped us really capture their image and themselves in parts. It’s not like a full description, but it was actually good enough to be one. Though, some things could be more detailed and more in depth, I think you did well.

Format: 5/5

I have no comment for this because you followed my guidelines and did well.

Flow/Detail: 9/10

You didn’t rush us readers into anything and you helped us follow along with the story well. You finished the story in 20 chapters, which is a good limit in my eyes. From the start, you moved through the 4 places at a seemingly great rate for me. Although, I kind of wish at some parts you could’ve spent more time at a couple of the places, but in the end I realized it was for the best to move at that rate.

The detail of everything was top notch. I am proud of this!

NOTE: As you know, with scenes, it should be in detail and planned very, very carefully. Examining and reading through the scene I saw a great deal of detail and it went well. You stated below in an author’s note that that scene was written by a co-author, which kind of upsets me a bit, because I have to give credit to that scene to her. I’m not for scenes with much, but I do read them when I have to, so it went well.

Creativity/Plot/Originality: 9/10

I have read stories of people running away from home and travelling, so this isn’t new to me. Although, I haven’t read a 2min fic with this story line and what happens in it…yet. So, I am glad this is something ‘new’ to me to read!

The plot to me was good! I enjoyed it and everything that surrounded the plot that made it what it was.

Your originality, like I stated above, isn’t the most original, but it is your own and it’s something ‘new’ to me with the characters and how you wrote it. So, good job!

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 28/30

I passed over a few typos – reread, reread, reread. I only say that because rereading your work is key. It has to be done whether you like it or not. For those good writers who have great grammar and who write well – like yourself for instance – they do reread, but they pass over very common mistakes.

You wrote this well – with great grammar, good vocab, and even some good spelling with the occasional typo here and there. I give you credit on this because stories like this I enjoy.

Overall: 83/100

Additional Comments:

This was a good story and I’m glad I reviewed it. Although I’m not much of a 2min fan, I really did enjoy this story. They are so cute together and I saw you have a sequel to it? I may have to check that out. I hope you liked the review, it is one of my highest rated I think. I’m shocked when my reviews are higher rated than normal, so that means you did something right. :]

Reviewer:

KissDromedaGirl