Username: inspirit_chan
Story Title (&link): The Glass Ghost

Main Characters (+pairings): Tao, Lee Eunhae (OC)
Featuring: EXO-M
Genre(s): Romance, Drama, Angst, Slice of Life
Current Length (No. of Chapters): 6 [though 5, numbered chapter one as 'zero'.]
Rated?: No, but has warnings and triggers for mentions of suicide, harm and depression.
Reviewer: KissDromedaGirl
PLOT:
    After an attempt at suicide by jumping off a building, Lee Eunhae is left with depression, a broken arm, and the loss of her best friend. She begins to find herself completely lost, dreams shattered, salvation ruined.
Life, as she knows it, suddenly becomes meaningless.
Follow the tale of a young girl who's lost her will in the journey to find a better life with help from a grudging classmate.
Notes:
    “I haven't really explained in my story how the title relates to the entire plot since I haven't gotten very far in, so I'd like to explain: "glass" relates to the emotionally fragile state my OC is in, and "ghost" refers to how she feels--alone and invisible. Just thought that I'd clear that up :)”

_______________ ✦일부분 일; part one; the beginning. ✦_______________

Title;  5/5
"The Glass Ghost" actually really drew me to the story itself. I always grab stories first (sorry other reviewers here) and I saw the title, instantly looked to the 'main idea' and I'm glad I did. You explained the meaning in your a/n to me, and it's beautifully crafted.

Poster/Background;  5/5
    No poster, but the background is actually really pretty for this. It's light, like the GIFS of Tao and Exo-M. It fits well with the overall theme (and I want to steal it.)
   But the GIFs make me feel a sense of wonder, confusion, hope, light air, winter time, softness, and other gentle things. This story doesn't need all the fancy posters and backgrounds. These simple things define it and help bring out the wonders of it.

Description & Foreword;  10/10
   On a personal note, I tend to draw closer to stories related to depression and suicide since I suffer from things. I'm not afraid to admit that. And this hits me personally, and I feel (instantaneously) how Lee Eunhae feels. Those like me will, too. Even people who are happy can feel the aura of what she feels. You word it very well and to the point it could strike you like an arrow. She loses her best friend, we wonder how. She's lost, we wonder why. Dreams shattered, we feel sad for her. Salvation ruined, we question it all.
    You don't have to suffer like her to get the idea of life feeling meaningless. And this description holds this story up to high standards for me. I expect trauma, I expect her emotionless state. I expect a lot, sadly, and I hope this goes well. From the description, I'm hooked like a fish.

   I have noticed lately a lot more people are putting reviewers' notes up for display and whatnot. I laugh because I'm afraid which comment will appear for mine... nonetheless, I digress...

______________ ✦두 번째 부분; the second part; the seam.✦______________

Creativity/Originality;  4/5
    I rarely see such captivating stories revolving around things like this. Most I see are good, I'll give the genre that, but this one stands out. You have two amazing leads - Tao is cute in the way he approaches the friendship, but he's also a real person since he wants to refuse the mentor position at first; Eunhae is vibrant even though her color has faded so much. You can still see parts of her that shine despite the depression and the aftermath of an attempted suicide. Eunhae is special and mysterious, even, and that brings a lot to this story. You write even the smaller characters with depth and that's the intriguing part! And then there's your stunningly graceful way with words and descriptions... I applaud you a lot. The creativity is in your characters and writing, the originality is linked to how this all goes. Since we're no where near done with the story (right?), I still leave this section open because I can envision so much more coming up.

Plot;  18/20
     I love the plot, but let me delve in to the 'one' chapter and factor out the happiness I've got for it and how it applies to the plot.
   Principal Kwon calls in the last remaining kid to fulfill a duty so large that even more acceptable students couldn't fulfill. She explains, and with that I became thrilled beyond belief. To start us out, you showed us a scene where the kid doesn't automatically take to being her mentor. You show us a Principal who is strict, but very open in that scene because she needs a student to help. He doesn't volunteer. He doesn't accept happily. He says he doesn't know her. He tries to back out. Though some may think that's the cliche part, it's not. You wrote this opening, explainatory scene of how Tao becomes her mentor and it's so realistic and not overly fluffed for readers. I love you for that.
    And this gives way to what we are going for and expecting: Tao mentoring/befriending the suicidal Lee Eunhae whom is giong to show us her world, all while we see their worlds mix and what's coming. Emotions are raw and we can't help but want more!

Spelling, Vocab, and Grammar;   15/15
    What do I even correct...? I found no errors in words, no run-ons; I could be blind, but I think you've done extremely well on this part. I love your style and how you make lovely sentences that can make us feel characters' emotions and more. So, I really have nothing to input on this section, which makes me thrilled, believe me!
   


Characterization;   15/15
    I am screaming internally. Why? Because there is a wide amount of detail in these characters to the point I envision them and get to know them thanks to the love of detail. Geez. We know Tao. We know the feelings he has. We got his image; somewhat to a degree thanks to Luhan we get the sense he is gay; the room is described. The emotions are on a platter for us. And I'm placing Tao on a pedestal to examine him more and I'm gifted with a peek into his world.

    Then there's Eunhae. We see her first in the chapter as she jumps to her death, but ultimately ends up alive while her best friend dies. She loses it all. And we don't meet her for a while, until she's unconscious after sobbing at her friend's memorial. It's a pretty, yet upsetting scene. Tao is somewhat affected, and we know from his point of view that Eunhae is stunningly gorgeous. We also know her suicide attempt. And even the last chapter I get to read - five - I see her so... afflicted by the fact she sees her best friend in Tao and she starts to panic internally. I would, too. I just... adore how she's written, her words, her emotions, her development. I hope to see more with her progression.

    EXO-M. Dear Lord. Classic, diverse, and well-done to a point I grin at some things they do or say.

  I really love the differences between each character and I enjoy how you've made them so realistic and just real - I swear I haven't seen this greatly written of a story in weeks...
 

_______________ ✦일부분 삼; part three; the little things. ✦_______________

Chapter Titles;  5/5
zero - falling.
one - the ticking of the clock
two - beautiful pain 
three - accepting
four - once more

    I only listened the names given because... they're impressions left by you, the author, of what the chapter holds and how you see it and/or want us to. I love the titles, even just the numbering in words. I quote a line from a favorite book of mine, "Very poetic." Except I mean that literally, whereas the original character who says that doesn't. Okay, moving on!


Flow;  10/10
    The flow is good. Nothing short of being well-timed, good scenes, and capturing dialogue and even thoughts given by the characters. The flow is great, good, and so on and so forth. I can't praise you enough for stuff. If I need hit, so be it. The flow is great, like everything else here. ^^ Also, I sense from the pace that there's a lot more to expect, and I'm just noting that because I'm crossing my fingers you follow through.

Writing Style (format + your style);  10/10
    From the first paragraph of this story, I leaned back and said: "Nope."
My cat looked at me, wondering what the Hell I was so agressive over.
    Not in a bad way though! The first paragraph is so freaking deep and so well-written. You tell us of this woman adorned by men and always recieving letters... but then suddenly she recieves her first suicide note and my heart shattered. And it only gets more astounding from there! Because not only do we feel sorrow at first... we then have our minds twisted as the step-mother discards the note and couldn't care less! I claim you as one of my favorite writers of 2015, lovely.
   Your style... I'm speechless. I have read stories about suicide... stories of emotional trauma... stories of losing someone or trying to be saved. I've read a lot of stories. But this one, and I don't know why, but I'm assuming it's your writing, has got me sitting in my chair, hand to my mouth, and trying to breath normally. You struck me like lightening only with the first chapter. You brought such an overwhelming, yet calming feeling to the story by showing us her death, her mindset, and how she loses her friend, only to be saved when her head says "no".
 

Extra & Notes; (+10)
This reviewer/reader is stunned. I want more. And I love getting to find gems amongst the reviews that I can praise, praise, praise! Yet if I appear a little too hyperactive over it, ignore that. Finding such gems gets me overexcited and I like to show the authors that. I know I'm just one lonesome reviewer, and each has their niche with stories, but if I'm impressed, you did awesome. End of story.

ps. cough. this stoy needs a trailer for my feels to feel more over.


Total Score; 107 ♡