Username: writerofthistory

Story Title (&link): WGM Boybands Special: Infinite and BTOB

Main Characters (+pairings): --

Genre(s): Comedy and Romance

Current Length (No. of Chapters): 4

Rated?: No

Reviewer: Jaekkae

_______________ ✦일부분 일; part one; the beginning. ✦_______________

Title;  3/5

Oh, it fit the story very much. It get straight to the point and is very straightforward. And I don't think you can get any more creative since you got to tell people that it is a WGM fic.

Poster/Background; 4/5

I didn’t understand why the posters are in the forewords… are you perhaps waiting for a new poster to be finished or is this just how you do things? I don’t know. And also, because there is 14 people starred in your story it will be hard to put them into covers (I’ve been there before). I suggest you to put them into shapes, like hexagon or squares. It will be neater. The BG is cool.

Description & Foreword;  5/10

The description was your thoughts and message so I didn’t really bother to mark it. But what I would suggest you to do is put it at the end of your foreword so people can read it after they’ve read the actual description or summary. It is kind of a turn-off for me so just take a moment to think about it.

The foreword confused me… why is there some names coloured pink and yellow while some are grey? And it would be neater if you put Infinite on one side and BtoB on the other. And I didn’t really find the foreword drawing me in… I just felt it was kind of futile. After reading the story, I didn’t get the pairing and you made it sound like a competition. Just saying.

______________ ✦두 번째 부분; the second part; the seam.✦______________

Creativity/Originality;  3/5

To be honest, I’ve seen quite a lot of WGM fanfics so I don’t think this is creative or original. And there has already been some boyxboy wgm fics so yeah...

Plot;  11/20

The plot is kind of old… I’ve seen a few like this floating around before. You match them up and then they fall in love. It’s pretty cliche actually.

Spelling, Vocab, and Grammar;   14/15

It is good, it’s just the punctuation mistakes and one or two complicated, not-reading-friendly words (basically fancy words or something not everybody knows).

I have some examples to show you since it will get messy. (There just examples, not in the actual text)

Ex: “But she said that ! Not me” Rosy exclaimed loudly.She pointed towards Janny and frowned. “Believe me !”

You tend to do a mistake like that.

Revised: “But she said that! Not me,” Rosy exclaimed loudly. She pointed towards Janny and frowned. “Believe me!”

Characterization;   8/15

I didn’t like the characters. They all sound like each other. There is a lack of character development, I feel that there should atleast be one that is grumpy or something. Every character seemed to have a twin in the other group.

_______________ ✦일부분 삼; part three; the little things. ✦_______________

Chapter Titles;  -/5

I didn’t mark this since there wasn’t any.

Flow;  6/10

It was going a little too fast. It just popped from one place to another and if you didn’t write the setting at the top, I would’ve gotten lost.

Writing Style (format + your style);  6/10

You used some bright colours like in chapter 2 and I didn’t really like it. You could have just said their names. And the font size was messed up in the second and fourth chapter. Try and get a layout if you can, it might look nicer.

Your writing style has a hole in it. It wasn’t descriptive, instead it was just dialogues. And I don’t like stories where they talk the whole way through, you added some thoughts in but not individual ones. And also, after you mentioned the setting you can at least describe it. Is it quiet? Peaceful? Beautiful? Trashed?

Extra & Notes;

I’m really sorry if it sound rude and whatnot but I do hope it helps. Maybe you can read some popular stories on AFF to get the gist of what I am talking about or you could check out one of my favourite Romcom story here: @yesternights (that’s the author’s un but the link redirects you to my fav story from her). Her stories revolves mostly around dialogues but it still have many relevant descriptions in it.

Total Score; ♡

60/95