LUDOS by thebaroness

 

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Title: 5 over 5

Your title is just PERFECT. It's really really making people curious with the meaning behind the word and I love how it's unique and catchy. You've done a very good job!



Poster & Background: 9 over 10

Both your poster and background gave me the fantasy vibe instead of highschool romance. Pretty, but I think it would be better if you chose a brighter colour since it's a fluffy teenage romance story.



Description & Foreword: 9 over 10

I love your description! I really like the way you tell readers about the meaning of the title—the way you explain the three types of love instead of just giving what Ludos means right away. My only problem is your description is a little bit too long and revealing too much. I think it would be better if it ended in the second part or if you switched the second and the third part, then deleted the rest.

For the foreword, I think the way you arrange the review credits is so creative. It's like what you usually found in novel covers and it's just brilliant.



Plot: 30 over 35

Not the most creative plot ever and the whole game thing kind of overused, but I love the fact that you make Violet used Kai too—since the female characters in stories like this usually do nothing but being used by the male characters and crying. Cliché and predictable, I must say, t