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Title: 4 over 5

I like your title! It's simple, catchy and fits the story well. I really like the way you use the word torn instead of broken or something; there's just something really painful about the word that made me curious.


 Poster & Background: 7 over 10

Considering you made your own poster, I guess it's good enough.  It shows the angst of the story, though it would be better if it's not blurred.


Description & Foreword: 7 over 10

The description turned me off. The sentences were too long, like, seriously, you put unnecessary commas there and I needed to re-read it to understand what you're trying to say. Here's the revision for your description (only a suggestion, though!): 

Suho had no idea that Yixing had a huge liking for him in the past year. The secret letters he sent to Suho’s locker went unnoticed for Suho already had someone special at that time; his close friend named Jongin, someone Yixing was clueless about.

The following year, as Yixing gave up on Suho, his hopes were set high again when he finally met Jongin. The meeting, somehow, was witnessed by Suho and it created a big tension among the two, especially when Yixing’s identity slowly opened up.  Who would win Jongin’s heart in the end?

Oh,