Reviewer: Aznchika @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/

Fanfic link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/7463/

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5

-Your title was a bit wordy, though no points will be deducted because of this since it did catch my attention. It would look more professional if you took away the period and capitalized your title. It should look like this: “30 Steps to Quitting Jonghyun”.  

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 7/10

-Let me just tell you straight off the bat that your poster isn’t bad – it’s just the fact that it looks plain that made me deduct points. Maybe it would look better if it was a character chart, but that’s up to you since you’re the designer. It just somewhat bothers me that there’s nothing in the background. Adding a quote should make your poster seem less spacey.

As for the chapter posters, the custom ones looked really nice.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 10/10

-Your foreword was exactly the way I liked it: it was interesting, some basic information, and humor. One thing I would like to inform you about is in your description, there’s a grammar error. Instead of ‘When the nations dear Kim Jonghyun of SHINee, admitted that he's dating the famous young actress, Shin Se Kyung. Kwon Nam Gyu's world started to shattered.’ , the last and second-to-last sentence should be connected. Other than that, good job!

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 12/15

-The main reason why I took off points was because it seemed cliché and unrealistic how Gyu has nearly half of the SHINee members chasing after her. Other than that, it was all good. Sure, the storyline may have been borrowed, but in my eye, you did make it interesting.

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 10/10

-You definitely deserve the ten points in characterization! Gyu is a fun, hilarious character that always made me laugh whenever she would comment about Jonghyun. Her attitude is very realistic, and the way she’s almost obsessed with her crush reminds me of me. As for the other members of SHINee, it’s cute to see them helping her. I don’t see why I should take away any points!

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 10/10

-Like I stated earlier, the storyline may have been borrowed, but you made it your own. I suppose you can consider yourself lucky since I don’t really read these kinds of fanfics often and I can’t be strict on the creativity and originality section. Either way, you made me fun, and that’s what matters. Full marks!

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 7/10

-I won’t point out every single mistake since I’m not your English teacher and you already forewarned us that English isn’t your first language. I will tell you that you should pay attention to the present/past tense words. Also, your punctuation isn’t top-notch, but it’s readable.

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 10/10

-I had no problem with the flow! It didn’t seem too choppy, and it wasn’t completely draggy either. Full marks again!

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 11/15

-Your writing style was entertaining and comical, which was what kept the reader coming. The way you word your sentence adds on to the emphasis, which was one of the reasons why I enjoyed it. Reasons why I took off points can be found in the ‘Overall Enjoyment’ section.

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 4/5

-Personally, I recommend writing with past tense (such as ‘said’, ‘walked’, ‘lied’, etc.) instead of present (says, smiles, laughs, etc.), but it’s up to you since this is YOUR story. Other than that, I very much enjoyed your story. Gyu is a fun character, and I wish she was my best friend in real life. Anyways, good luck with your story!

`Total : 84/100

`Bonus : 2/5

-I really love SHINee <3

-Your story was entertaining [: I remember I read it before

Overall Total: 86/100