Reviewer: SKID_11 @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/

FANFIC LINK: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/15524/

‘Story Title [did it catch my attention?]: 2/5

I’m afraid “Remember Me” didn’t attract my attention. It’s a title that no doubt many people use, and I’m not exactly interested in angsty romance stories, and tend to stay away from those, so I wouldn’t click on this.

However, you made it obvious that it was angst and romance – I didn’t even have to glance at the story tags to realize this, which is why I decided to give you two out of five marks.

Ideas for story title: “Did You Forget?” or “Don’t/Never Let Me Go,” perhaps. Something along these lines would be something you should choose, I believe. A good idea would be to find a song that goes well with this story and either use the song title as your story title or use a small part of the song as the title. I do that pretty much all the time! :)

‘Appearance [what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?]: 8/10

 I was rather mutual with this section, to be honest. My first impression wasn’t bad, but it wasn’t good, either.

The poster needs a bit of work. I like the title’s font and it looks nice, but it just looks so...plain. Sure, it makes the poster look dark, like it should for an angsty story, but it looks dark as in it looks black, and nothing else. The poster is missing a background, which you can obviously tell.

Apart from that, the cropping of the pictures was splendid. I liked how there were no randomly jutting angles or unnecessary fuzziness – the pictures looked professionally cropped, so that was splendid. :)

‘Forewords [did your forewords make me wanting to read more?]: 9/10

Nice, short, and to the point. Just the way I like it. XD

The only reason I docked a mark is because it sounds kind of cliché to me; the description only, though.

The foreword was wonderful, on the other hand. It made you wonder who the guy was, who the girl was, why the guy was moving, and what would happen next. And you used the foreword the way it was meant to be used – no character charts attached! :)

Good job on this section!

‘Plot [was the plot cliché or was it interesting?]: 14/15

Wonderful plot, really. It might seem a bit confusing in a few parts to other readers, though. However, readers who are more mature, more used to descriptions and details and, overall, don’t mind reading something with a not-so-childish plot like this are bound to love this story!

‘Characterization [was I able to learn about the characters?]: 9/10

You bet I was! :)

I love how the characters all seem real, even “you”! :D Doojoon and Junhyung act exactly how guys should act like, which makes me believe that you have a firm grasp not only on your characters, but on the male species in general. 0_0 You are the rare species between us girls, who actually can understand what guys think/do, so good job on that as well!

‘Creativity/Originality [was it creative?]: 9/10

The whole past-coming-back-to-haunt you was the only reason a point was docked here. Apart from this cliché, you were fine, and you even managed to make the cliché your own in this story, which I should give you a salute for! *salutes*

‘Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary [was I able to understand what you were trying to say?]: 9/10

The spelling and vocabulary were bang on, my friend! ^^ You had enough details, descriptions, and never became too lazy to add more words, which I was overly happy about! This story was a good read for me.

There were a few mistakes here and there when it came to grammar, however. But everyone has troubles with pesky grammar. -__-

For example –

(chapter two, entitled Chapter Two)

“Hold the doors please!”

A simple mistake here, really. Usually, when you’re talking, you’d pause a bit before the “please.” And so, that means that is where you should add the comma in a story, like so:

“Hold the doors, please!”

It was just minor mistakes like that, which was why I took out one mark in this section.

‘Flow [was it too fast or too slow to my liking?]: 8/10

The reason I docked two marks here was because, sometimes, the writing didn’t flow too well. You should join your sentences together sometimes, rather than just starting another sentence, for it sounds awkward and the pause seems to be too soon. If you read your story aloud, you’ll understand what I mean.

Apart from that, the overall flow of the story was perfect! Not too fast, not too slow, and the writing flow was not crazily choppy, which is good.

‘Writing Style [did your writing style make it easy for me to read?]: 13/15

Awesome! I love your writing style! >.< It was descriptive enough and flowed well in some parts, and I’m so glad that your second point of view writing isn’t as bad as some other writers’ are. Sometimes they are simply atrocious to read, and so I stay away from those.

But this one was actually good! I spotted little-to-no mistakes here when it came to the second point of view, so the point of view was done exceptionally well.

The reason I docked two marks here was, once more, the writing flow of the story.

‘Over all Enjoyment [did I enjoy this story?]: 4/5

Definitely! It was a fun read, but unfortunately not something I’d come back to read if I had the choice to do so. So, overall, it was a fun, onetime read.

I took out one point since BEAST isn’t my favourite K-Pop band, which is a reason I wasn’t too overly excited while reading this. Mianhae! X(

‘Total: 85/100

‘Bonus: 3/5

Three extra marks for the wonderful second point of view writing and epic descriptions! ;D

Overall Total: 88/100