The Key to the Master Bedroom by FanFicWriter20
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Reviewer: aznchika @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/
FANFIC LINK: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/22430/
`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 4/5
-It somewhat caught my attention. Just by judging your title, I could tell it had to do something with the two main characters living in the same house. I consider that I good thing [:
`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 10/10
-Love your poster! I like the way it looks like a scrapbook and the descriptions underneath gives me an idea of what will happen in the story. The background is cute too!
`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 9/10
-Your forewords were interesting. The synopsis made me curious about what would happen in the story, though I’ve read a lot similar to this plot. At first, Hana gave off the impression of a Mary-Sue (and trust me, I hate Mary-Sues) but then I realized she’s just a normal teenager – not average, but normal. Key, however, is such a DIVA. Love it!
`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 14/15
-The plot was somewhat cliché, and it’s also often common in stories, but your ideas are very creative and unique! It’s fun to read new ideas, and that’s why I really liked this story! It made me laugh, and the way Key and Hana describe their feelings are hilarious! You managed to lead your story away from what I see often, and I give you kudos for that. I loved everything from the beginning to the end- the happy moments to the heartbreaks! Awesome job!
`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 10/10
-I really like the fact that they mature throughout the story, and Taemin really makes me laugh with his banana milk! I actually CRIED- yes, sweetheart, CRIED- like 5 times. The way you show their actions let me know what their personality is like. Full points!
`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 9/10
-It is creative and original in its own way. I’ve never really seen the ideas in the story before- though it’s mentioned in your other stories- but still. Nicely done!
`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 8/10
-There were a few minor mistakes, probably typos from typing too fast. Your description and details make up for it though. I understood what you were trying to get across, and I like the fact that you add in some vocabulary throughout the story.
`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 8/10
-I personally thought the story would be better if it was slightly shorter. Some people tend to lose interest if a fanfic drags on for too long. I wouldn’t say the flow was slow- I would just say you have too many ideas to add.
`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 15/15
-Love your writing style! It’s funny, cute, and makes me cry (Lol, I guess that’s a good thing). Keep up the great work!
`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5
-I enjoyed this fanfic a lot! I just love Key, and Hana is the perfect girl for him! Hope they have a happy ending without any more heartbreaks in their path!
`Total : 92/100
`Bonus : 4/5
-You have a fantastic sense of humor!
-Key and Hana are just too cute!
-The heartbreaks make me cry
-Their past is really rough, but it’s very important to the story!
Overall Total: 96/100 BABEH xD
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