Snow Brigade @ http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/23510/

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : The poster was really eye-catching and it represented the title well! 9/10

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : It was great! You described enough, but not a lot and you left a question in the reader’s head that makes them want to read more. The forewords’ really important and you wrote it perfectly well, it left a good impression on me. Also, you just copied the forewords from a part of your story and I like that, too. I have to praise you for the great writing! 10/10

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : The plot wasn’t that unique and special, but you write the story so full of emotion I can’t help but love. Like I said, I like tragic stories. Not just because of my interest about loneliness, but the plot was clear and you would bring up the snow brigade every once in a while just to remind people that your keeping the plot in control and doing a good job on it. 14/15

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : You wrote Key’s character really well, like what he’s going through and what he hates. You describe his personality and feelings carefully and full of emotion. It was great! You also did a good job on everyone else, too! ‘A person can change’ you taught me that. 10/10

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : It was creative! The way you described Key’s life and how everything happened, you made it very vivid, and I like that. I can say you’re very creative! And that’s a good thing. 9/10

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : I understand that English isn’t your first language and you worked hard on writing the story, but I have to say, you really need to work on your grammar. There are more than a few grammar mistakes. You should reread the story every time you finish typing a chapter, when you read it, and it doesn’t sound right, you have to fix it right away! The first chapter was hard to understand, but in the next few chapters, there were lesser grammar mistakes, keep it up. 6/10

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : It was on a steady pace, each chapter is full of information, but not the boring and full of nothing type. But you shouldn’t make a chapter so long; the reader will get tired of reading. 8/10

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : If you don’t count the grammar mistakes, then yes, it is easy to read. You use a different way to write then most people and I like it. 14/15

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : The story is going great! I enjoyed it a lot and it’s so full of passion. 5/5

`Total : 90/100

`Bonus : 5/5

Overall Total: 95/100

Thanks for requesting from Monochroma​tic Pixel. This is the first time I gave a person such a high score! JYou did really well.