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`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : I liked it a lot! It fitted the story well and it had enough mystery just in the four words. It explained the story well, but it also left a question in the readers mind. “What’s the reason?” They’ll think, and I really like making the readers think and wonder. It’ll make them want to read the story more. 5/5

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : Not going to count it since you don’t have a poster. -/10

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : It did, but at the same time, you revealed too much about the story. Try not to say a lot okay? 7/10

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : It was an interesting plot! I’ve never read it before and I’d like to know more about it. You might not know that I like sad tragic stories, but I do and your story was clearly my taste! 14/15

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] :The way your described the characters were very clear and easy to remember. Personalities change, people change, that’s what you want to say about Mir right? 7/10

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : It was very creative indeed, I’ve never read a story like this before. The mysteriousness gives the readers a feeling making them wanting to read more. I like that about your story, the originality and the creativity, it’s what makes a story good, and you, have just done both. 10/10

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : No mistakes in particular, I just want you to remember. Reread, recheck is really important. There were some minor spelling mistakes so you should recheck what you have written. The sentences were easy to read, but not too simple or hard to understand. 9/10

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : It’s on a steady pace, you don’t reveal too much and every sentence connects with the other, which helps the flow of the story. Not much to say since you did pretty well yourself already, but do remember, don’t make your story too slow or writing a chapter too long. The readers will get bored. 7/10

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : This is the one point you really need to work on, you should note who’s talking clearly. You shouldn’t just make it italic; it’s very hard to read. It’s alright to use italic in flashbacks and thoughts in the mind, but actually using it as people talking…that’s not quite right. 9/15

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] :It was mysterious and I like mysterious stories. A lot. 4/5

`Total : 72/90(Not counting the Appearance)

`Bonus : 5/5

Overall Total: 77/90(Not counting the Appearance)