FANFIC LINK: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/38994/

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 2/5

It kind of caught my attention. Although I’m confuse on what’s the connection of the title to the story.  It’s like… the title doesn’t have much connection with the story itself. I feel like it doesn’t match the story well.

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 3/10

When I got to read the description, I was like “Oh gosh… here comes the plot of best friend relationship to lovers…” I don’t see anything new or that could make me go “WOW!”  I felt like it’s another typical love story.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 4/10

I suggest you could have added previews to your story that can make the readers wonder or think and could get their attention to read more or maybe that could make them feel the excitement or eager to read more. 

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 5/15

I really think the plot is cliché. It’s like another typical love story that everyone knows what’s gonna happen next.

Well… your story is not yet finished but so far, I didn’t see anything “new” or an “explosion” to the story that could make the readers go “wow! I was wrong. This story is definitely not a typical one.”

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 7/10

I was a  confused on who is saying this and that. Some of the characters’ lines were unclear and confusing.

Although it’s good that you don’t use too much characters in the story… J

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 4/10

Like what I said, the story was a cliché. Nothing new or special, so far.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 4/10

Please be aware of your spacing. Remember after placing a punctuation mark, you have to give a space to write another sentence.

Also please lessen your use of commas. You use the comma often and a lot of times in just one sentence and it’s annoying. Also, you always repeat same punctuations quite often in one sentence. So please use punctuations correctly.

Also, check your spellings.

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 8/10

On some parts, the flow is a bit fast.

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 9/15

Well, I only have two problems with your writing style. It’s a bit confusing and your use of punctuation marks is quite annoying.

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 2/5

Well I could say that so far, it’s not that bad. But I can’t really say that I fully enjoyed reading your story.

`Total : 48/100

`Bonus : -3/5

Overall Total: 51/100

Hope I helped you on this review. No hard feelings, ok? =]