FF Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/36833/

Review by:  aznchika @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 5/5

-Honestly, at first, I didn’t even know what the word ‘Retribution’ meant, but when I looked it up and got my answer, I was immediately hooked.

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 10/10

-I would have to say I totally love the poster. It’s fascinating, and the cute guys in it definitely adds to the charm. Mary did an amazing job with the poster, and I would definitely give it an immediate 10 out of 10!

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10

-To be honest, it sounded not very fascinating- this is just my opinion, of course. Your forewords also lacked a character descriptions and a hook. First impressions are important, so I suggest adding more for an introduction.

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 14/15

-I’d say for the most part, I liked it. There were a few parts where I felt the story was getting somewhat cheesy, but other than that, I say it was pretty interesting! Good job!

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 10/10

-I have no problem giving you a ten in this category! You thoroughly introduced the characters through their actions and words, and the reader can tell exactly who had which persona. Full marks [:

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 10/10

-Your story is very creative and unique! Though the plot has been used multiple times already, your ideas are different, and that’s what keeps the readers come! Full marks!

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 10/10

-Definitely a ten out of ten! You used perfect- or near perfect- grammar, punctuation, and spelling! I can also tell you like using vast vocabulary in your writing, which is good since it really appears more professional. It seems like you really put in a lot of effort while writing, and I’m glad that you do because many authors on Asianfanfics nowadays don’t seem very serious with their stories. Great job once again [:

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 9/10

-The flow, for the most part, was perfect. It wasn’t exactly too slow, but it wasn’t too fast either. One thing I would like to add, however, is that I felt some parts tend to lag on. Other than that, it was pretty good [:

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 13.5/15

-Your story looks very professional and well-written, and I’m sure anyone who has read even the first paragraph can agree with me on that. The way you write reminds me of those very famous authors like JK Rowling, the author of Harry Potter- it’s very explanatory and perfected. I’m not saying it’s a bad thing, but to be honest, it seemed too serious sometimes, which tends to get slight boring. But that’s just my opinion! Other than that, keep up the great work! I bet you’ll be a famous author one day!

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 4/5

-I enjoyed the story! Like I stated before, it was very professional and well written. I enjoy the thought of the supernatural, but sometimes, I think it’s too much.

`Total : 90.5/100

`Bonus : 2/5

-Very well-written! You seem serious about your work!

-Love 2PM [:

Overall Total: 92.5/100