Reviewer: Sappira @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/

Fanfic link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/29594/

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 4/5

I don’t like your title but rather I love it! It’s so refreshing and unique. It really caught my attention and I felt excited on reading your story.  I really had a thought on what’s up with the title? Or why is it like that?  Although when I read it, it seems like it doesn’t make sense.  lol… I don’t know why.  O.o But seriously, I really love your title. So, Good Job!

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 8/10

The first that came into my mind was like, “Oh Gosh… This is going to be another ‘story’ I’ll be reading.” But when I started reading your story, it proved me wrong. I felt this exciting feeling like I just couldn’t stop reading.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 9/10

The forewords look simple but it’s enough to catch the readers’ attention, which is good.  J

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] :12 /15

I find your story interesting. Although I’ve read some stories that are like this, but I think it was pretty exciting and not boring.

This is not the kind of plot that I could just guess what’s going to happen next, which is what I’m looking for. Something that could make me want to read more.  I didn’t expect that your story would be this interesting.

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 10/10

I don’t think I have problems with the characters. It’s not confusing on who says this and that. It’s all in order.

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] :  9/10

I could say definitely you have both qualities. I think your story is just simply perfect. I love how you make each scene of every chapter.  It’s like after reading the first chapter, I was like “OMG! What’s going to happen next?!”

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 8/10

Well, you mad some common errors.  Like some of your sentences have wrong punctuation marks. But the rest are good. J

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 10/10

I think the flow is just right.

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 14/15

I love the way you write your story. It’s like I’m really watching a TV Show. It’s detailed enough for me to imagine the scenes. It’s like I’m reading a book. And it’s really good that you put the name of the person on every chapter on who’s POV it is, which made your story really organized.

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5

Yes, I totally enjoyed reading your story. J Good Job!

`Total : 89/100

`Bonus : 4/5

Overall Total: 93/100

Hope I helped you in this review. J