Reviewer: Sherioka @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/

FANFIC LINK: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/14130/

`Story Title [did it catch my attention?]: It caught my attention, questions started forming in my head and motivated me to read more. and alphabet…What does these two have in common? You named the title well; it was simple and full of meaning. 5/5

`Appearance [what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : The poster was simple and I like it. It doesn’t have weird unusual things that have nothing to do with the story, like flowers and all those special effects for example. I thought the effects and materials for the poster matched perfectly, making the main point of the poster more outstanding. The same goes for the chapter posters, each member from SHInee’s head was big and clear, and so were the words on the poster. 10/10

`Forewords [did your forewords make me wanting to read more?]: Your forewords aren’t the ‘long and spoiling story type’ it was short and full of meaning. You got to the main point of the story right away, catching the reader’s interest at the first sight. Reading so many words, the readers will get bored, too. So it’s good that you wrote less, and even better when you struck the main point. 9/10

`Plot [was the plot cliché or was it interesting?]:The plot was funny and interesting, not everyone completed their letter. And the progress throughout the whole story was cute and funny. You made it creative and hard to not keep reading. I like it a lot. Good job! 14/15

`Characterization [was I able to learn about the characters?]:I learned about the characters, but mostly everyone has the same personality. Except for Jonghuyn, I want you to describe more next time. I can see that everyone and their girlfriends are really close, other than making Jonghuyn so special; you should work on describing each of the character’s feelings and stuff like that more. 6/10

`Creativity/Originality [was it creative?]:It was creative, not much fun to read at first, but later on, more circumstances and things to face happens, adding spice to the story. It’s creative, but you can still work on adding more surprises and romance between each chapter, making the story more connected to each other and more fun and easy to read. 8/10

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary [was I able to understand what you were trying to say?]:Some grammar mistakes here and there. It could have been avoided. Reread and rechecking every time you finish writing a chapter is really important. But overall, nothing big to mention, just remember to recheck. 7/10

`Flow [was it too fast or too slow to my liking?]: Every chapter represents an alphabet, so it’s hard to change the flow since you already know each chapter was suppose to do what. Some parts other than doing the game, it was progressed well and you didn’t rush about the part, or write it too slowly. I’m not sure how to say this, but you describe the parts really good and the flow was kept under control. 9/10

`Writing Style [did your writing style make it easy for me to read?]: Stating who is talking is really important. Some phrases were all mixed up together and I don’t know who was talking at all, work on that. 11/15

`Overall Enjoyment [did I enjoy this story?]: Of course! The story was exciting and enjoyable! So cute! Can’t understand who’s talking, well, only sometimes. 4/5

`Total: 83/100
`Bonus: 5/5

Overall Total: 88/100

Reviewer’s note: Could have gotten 90 and above! Keep on writing, I’ll be reading the new updates ;D