review by: cerebral @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com

ff link: Hana Yori Dango: Super Junior Edition

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5

To the point, I just felt like there could’ve been better ways to name this story.  I still understand only the witty are capable of creating such a title that can still do so.

But I’ll give my own shot at it:  Flower Four:  Super Junior Four (Cheap :()
`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 10/10

I smell hard work.  Everything seemed well thought out when you created everything.
`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 7/10

I pressed two thumbs up when I read through the foreword.  YOU DIDN’T select your biases.  YOU DIDN’T!  The characters selected made so much sense!  But that’s not the only thing.  You told the reader what to expect completely well!
`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : -/15

I can’t grade you on this as the plot has only just begun.  But I can tell you you’re just simply rewriting the F4 drama script.  Change the pool ball game at the end of chapter two to another game.  Change the red notice to a black notice or something.  Change their personalities a little bit more. Please do try, just tiny twists in plot, as you said, will not actually do enough.  I do hope your twists will in the end be BIG twists.  But your remake seems 100% the same as the original, in which is a bad sign for me.
`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 6/10

I don’t know how to do this without knowing all F4 characters from EVERY drama I watched -.-

There’s only two chapters but I do get the basic idea of the characters which is pretty damn good.

However, you have NO VARIATIONS from the regular F4. 
`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 4/10

This isn’t your idea so I’ll solid take points off just for that.

There is not enough variation even after using another’s plot.  I have watched Boys Over Flowers and I can recall all of this perfectly.  If you remake a story, don’t make it to the point that everyone can recall this part and go ah!  It’s exactly the same.  Compare and contrast the three F4 dramas, they all do what feels like a complete different story.

You’re creativity is well built though.  You used other celebrities for even the most minor characters, and it really helps out with the image.  I feel as if regular people would just use another random name.
`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 7/10

Subtle mistakes nobody will really notice.

Vocabulary will definitely make your story flow like a river.
`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 10/10

The story flow could be much longer and much more detailed, but it’s perfect the way it is and keeps me reading.
`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 10/15

Not enough imagery, I wish I knew how these guys looked.  How gorgeous (Kangin COUGH COUGH) they are and ect.  That stuff actually helps personality formation a bit.
`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 1/5

If only I didn’t feel like I was reading the drama script.
`Total : 58/85
68%
`Bonus : 5/5

-I don’t read much and have wanting to read a fanfic on Kangin for god knows HOW LONG.  <3
Overall Total: 63/85=74%

Feel free to request again when you plot fully blooms, otherwise I cannot give a very good review.