Reviewer: aznchika @ http://monochromaticpixel.tumblr.com/

Fanfic Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/38793

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : -4.5/5

-Your title was interesting, but honestly, if I were to browse through the list of fanfics, I would pass this story. It’s not exactly eye-catching, but like I stated before, it is interesting. Before I read it, I was wondering why you titled it this particular name, which is good since it means the readers are interested. When I finally read the explanation, I was like ‘Wow, that’s really clever’!

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 8/10

-I really liked the blend of colors in the BG, but I felt as if something was missing in the poster. Maybe it was because the font was too small, but it kept bugging me. I know it’s not your fault and you can’t do anything about it now, but I would probably have liked it better with a small description or quote underneath the title.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 8/10

-You had everything a foreword was supposed to have, but honestly, I think you overdid it a little. It dragged on, being way too long, and that lost my interest. This, of course, is only my opinion- you can choose what you want to do.

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 15/15

-I had to admit, the storyline was pretty interesting. Honestly, I thought the story would be cheesy after reading the description, but I have to admit I was wrong. The ideas aren’t common. You made the fanfic unique and that was what I liked about it.

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 10/10

-Full marks! Your characters had realistic personalities, just like a normal person would be! It’s uncommon nowadays to find stories without any rivals or arrogance. I like reading about different characters once in a while, so I really enjoyed this story. Good job [:

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 10/10

-I’m not going to be strict on this- the theme may be borrowed, but it’s unique and original overall. Full marks again [:

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 9.5/10

-I barely found any mistakes and the ones I did find were pretty minor such as accidentally switching to present tense and use of homophones. Other than that, there weren’t many errors. Good job [: I can tell you’re serious about your work!

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 9.5/10

-I’m pretty sure it’s just me, but I found the time-changes confusing. I’m a pretty slow person, so it’s technically my fault, but other than that, you did great!

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 15/15

-I had no problems with your writing style! It delivered a clear message to the readers, and I don’t see why I shouldn’t give you a fifteen. Continue writing and I bet one day, you’ll become a great author!

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5

-Like I stated before, you definitely surprised me. This story was amazing, and I hope you continue writing and improving your skills [:

`Total : 94.5/100

`Bonus : 3/5

-Very clever title!

-Amazing story!

-My first Taemin and Sulli fic [: That’s why it’s special!

Overall Total: 97.5/100