Spit It Out by NavyBlue and DGNA_Forever by NavyBlue and DGNA_Forever

Title (9/10)
I gave high points for the originality of the title. It doesn't really relate that well to your story, like I can see how it can somehow...but there's really no relationship to your overall plot or any discreet point in the story.

Foreword/ Description (8/10)
I think it's more of the lack of vivid details, but your description seems really dull. It's doesn't make me want to read the story. I feel like there isn't enough information in your foreword. Since it was one shot, I guess it's quite okay but I really wish there was more foreshadowing in this. I just feel like there just isn't anything that's like particularly attracting me into the story.
 

Characterization (6/10)
The characters in the story was too vague and there are too many holes regarding them. Make e sure to take some space to describe their feelings. In other words, make the characters have a lot of life, and they feel real enough for the readers to fall in love with them.


Appearance (4/5)
think the overall appearance could be greatly improve with