Batch Four  she's a gun by hyerinana

Title (10/10)
I was grabbed the title. It's really interesting and related to the story.

Foreword/ Description (6/10) 
The description was quite interesting but I don't get the dialogue and can't understand who is talking. The dialogue is a big problem in the story and it affects your story in so many ways. Those turn me off when reading, no matter how good the plot is. Make your description simple and introduce the single overriding conflict, end with a killer sentence that makes them beg to read more. Currently your description makes me want to look elsewhere because I can’t keep track of anything that’s going on and it certainly doesn’t capture my attention. I hope you could improve this during your journey as a writer!

Characterization (2/10)
I likes bad female characters but there was no developement in characters as I read the story. Just a bunch of dialogues and I don't even know who is talking to who. It was quite confusing. I would not say I struggled to read this story but I certainly had some difficulty. I didn't even see the significance of characters in the sto