Batch Three Review
A Piece of Paradise by younghyojin

Story Title: A Piece of Paradise

Author: younghyojin

Story Summary: 
The big three entertainment agency in South Korea is up to something. There is a big project coming up, and it's starting. For some people it's going to be a life changing event, for the first time ever, YG, JYP and SM is going to have a collaboration for their new group. But, can something unexpected happen, well, something like love?

Reviewer: xxshininglight

 

Title (8/10)

 This title is really well, unique. Not quite eye-catching.  It is quite relevant to the story, I really like how your title revolves around the whole story.

 

Foreword and Description (7/10)

 Overall, the foreword is neat and nicely presented. It doesn't give away too much information at all but it sounds a little bit vague. It doesn't grip my attention fully. Also there are some mistakes. 

Original: She was and always be a talented person.
Correction: She was and alway is a taleneted person. 

Original: will it turn out to be a mutual feelings,or just another heart break?
Correction: feeling

Original: for the first time ever, YG, JYP and SM is going to have a collaboration for their new group.
Correction: of 

 

Characterization(7/10)

You could try to protray characters more. Express character's feelings and make them pop to readers. Play with rea