Batch Four Piercing Us back Together BY whiteknight

Title (8/10)
The thing I liked about your title is the fact that it is different. The choice of words here was well done.I really do like your title due to the obvious and important connection it has to your actual story. It gives out angst vibe but it doesn't really grip my attention fully.

Foreword/ Description (10/10) 
Now, the description was fantastic; it generates an aura of mystery to your story which I appreciated without giving away too much of the story, but at the same time summarised the story quite beautifully.


Characterization (9/10)
Wonderful job with the characterization.I personally thought your characters were pretty solid. No one really scram out at me as amazingly written but I really have no complaints regarding them either.


Plot/Storyline (22/25)
Though, your plotline wasn't entirely original,