Batch Three Review
Under the Cherry Blossom  by Baboboo

Story Title: Under the Cherry Blossom

Author:  Baboboo

Story Summary: 
 A simple love story that started under the Cherry Blossoms.Jessica Jung had never planned to date anyone, until she met a guy with zero existence. 

Reviewer: Baozi

 

Title (7/10)

The title is good but not really eye catching. It lets the reader know what the story is going to be about without revealing too much. It links well with the theme of your story and has a nice sound to it.

 

Foreword and Description (7/10)

The foreward is okay. It's a really good idea as it provides that information without bogging you down in the actual story. On another note I did notice a few minor mistakes. 

Mistake: a ice
Correction: an ice

Mistake: kick start 
Correction: kick-start

 

Characterization(7/10)

Like most of the authors, you don't reveal your characters' feelings perfectly but you did okay.  Also I like your characters' personalities. You make Kris with zero existence unlike other stories where Kris is a cold kingka, so I will credit to your creativity. 

 

Plot / Storyline (17/25)

The story itself is taking place in high school, so it's not really original. I couldn't say the plotline is all cliche and stuff because I could see you put some of your unique footprints