Batch Four   by Feebear88

Title (7/10)
II can certainly see the relationship between your title and story. Though the connection between the title and the story is deep, it doesn't seem very strong to me. The title itself doesn't grab my attention that much.

Foreword/ Description (9/10) 
I love how you were able to at least give your readers a brief explanation of the main topic/concept of the story, but you were still able to give enough suspense or mystery to your story.

Characterization (8/10)
Since the story is not progressing yet, I had a hard time, seeing how the characters develope. For now, the characterizations are good but not perfect. The reactions to certian events and situations look quite real. You can elaborate more on the character's feelings and use some metaphors or similes to create an emotional impact on the readers. 


Plot/Storyline (21/25)
Your plot is pretty simple but your