Batch Four  Teru Teru Bozu by whiteknight

Title (10/10)
I am absolutely in love with your title. It simply suits the story so perfectly and ties in quite well.I like it. The fact that it's incredibly relevant and the fact that I could not picture another title for your story, support my liking towards it.

Foreword/ Description (8/10) 
Everything throughout was well written. But I think you could have written more about the plot. For example, the significance of teru teru boz’ in the story since it is.

Characterization (7/10)
The characters were alright to me but I didnt feel any connection to them. Make it more descriptive about characters. However, I think that all chracters are well described. Just make the characters more interesting. 

Plot/Storyline (20/25)
The plot was alright and it's a simple story. It felt rather rushed throughout the story and it might be better if there's dynamic in the story. I can't say that there's a unique twist to add for the story.

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