Batch Four THe Oh Siblings by Gonexx 

Title (5/10)
From the very beginning I lost interest in your fanfiction. The reason is simple, your title literally screams cliché and boring. The title upon first glance isn't exactly appealing.  I wouldn't click on the title. It somehow relates to the plotline, so overall is not that bad. 

Foreword/ Description (6/10) 
The description is a good way of introducing the story and you didn't do very well on that. There is nothing grip my attention. Put something that makes people want to read the stor. I am not telling you to lay out the whole plot for the story. Just a little bit of sneak peak of your story and it will be fine. 


Characterization (5/10)
All of your characters were flat that they become hard to even discuss on this section. I couldn't see the character's feelings and thoughts at all in the story. Since there's only five chapters, I'm sure you have plans to develop both these characters more.  I don't want to sound harsh, but it was  boring to read about them.  I haven't formed any