“From A Distance”

By: Ddeokbxkkii.

Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance.

1-Title: Usually the titles of romantic pieces tend to be exhausted and overused; it avoids complexity and settles for the low-hanging fruit that is within every author’s reach. “From A Distance” isn’t particularly enthralling or gripping, it suggests the anxious route to romance which is commonly discussed here at the platform. I hope the title isn’t too physical and literal to the story; otherwise, it ought to come off as predictable and easy. I suggest choosing a title that is a bit more theatrical, if you’re too cautious of doing so, then just add a subtitle. However, I do suggest choosing a title that’s a little more dramatic and intriguing. Your story has both the supernatural and angsty feel to it, it needs a stronger title. But, since you already have the title on every poster and image of the story, then really there’s nothing to do here. Just keep it.

Rating: [8/10].

2-Description/Foreword: The description is basic and proper, easily explained and well-presented. However, it’s a tricky matter to mainly insert a quote from the story as a description for the entire story; try re-writing the description using snippets and hints from the story and THEN insert the quote. Otherwise, the description won’t feed the story its deserving attention.

The Foreword portion is neat and brilliant; you’ve given credit which shows courtesy and respect. That’s an important detail for the author’s reputation. The cover is absolutely beautiful and suits the theme of the story perfectly.

Rating: [9/10].

3-Plot: The story opens with a tragic event which will enrapture the audience to read into each and every small detail that hints of any clarification or explanation. So far, the story is progressing nicely and with a cautious speed. What I do want to say is, when starting a story with a busy event such as tragedy; the readers will expect a lengthy process of recovery, not for the characters but for the story itself. It takes more than one chapter to shift between the emotionally draining events to other events. This process is very significant in literature; because it helps avoid inexplicable peripetia that might affect the quality of your work.

The shifting between the past and present is very well-done, the chronological interruption did not appear frail or inadequate; it was done with evident care and was well-thought out. The storyline is neat and tidy, no messy metaphors, no overused clichés and no outlandish conclusions. Despite the fact that you’ve mentioned the characters in a list during the introduction, characters cannot be introduced in such haste, it doesn’t allow the readers to process each character in its own individual field of ingenuity.

Your writing is beautiful, there’s no way to deny that. However, the story is progressing beautifully, yet slowly; mainly two trivial events happened during chapter three. You need to move it along in a faster pace before your readers become impatient. You cannot mix angst and slow events together, it’ll produce a l