“Love the Way You Lie”

By: Baetaetae.

Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance.

1-Title: The title of your story speaks of betrayal, heartache, and tragedy; it sets a melancholic atmosphere for the readers before actually diving into the story. However, musical-inspired titles tend to narrow the field of imaginative vision regarding the readers’ opinions. It subdues any possible astonishment and could mask the story as unoriginal. So, be careful of such unintended judgment.

Rating: [9/10].

2-Description/Foreword: The description is plain, simple and respectively brief; you can’t really go wrong with that considering how short your story is. There’s really nothing to be said here, the description is suitable and the cover is absolutely brilliant.

Rating: [10/10].

3-Plot: Right, the beginning is actually enthralling; it has the primary aspects of gripping drama. However, when such scenes occur at the beginning of a story, make sure to provide the readers with the appropriate amount of background information which they can use for reference regarding the events in the first chapter. Choosing to place a conflict at the beginning of a story is tricky because to build any sort of conflict you’ll need two opposing forces, either of those will construct its own following, whether it’s an immediate resolution or a series of proceeding events. The readers can sometimes find difficulty in siding with either character due to the lack of sufficient information regarding the root of the said conflict.

Speaking of the length of your story, the chapters are tremendously long, that could drive some readers into ignoring some important details or aspects of the story because of how intimidating the length is. Try editing out some unnecessary points in each chapter, such as an excessive amount of descriptive scenery, overly complex internal dialogues and aimless monologues. 6k word for one chapter is over the limit and you could check out my profile where I posted a poll asking people of the perfect amount of words per chapter, most of them answered with 2-3k per chapter.

Plot-twists and es are usually placed in the middle of the story, so don’t overcharge the when you need to flourish a final conclusion after the conflict. Your setting of the consisted of one character’s goals while neglecting the other character. The readers need to know why each character is involved in such a conflict, and you should choose a resolution which is proper to work as a closure.

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