"Neon Nights" By: TEZMiso.
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“Neon Nights”
By: TEZmiso.
Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance.
1-Title: “Neon Nights” seems like sensible title, a label which doesn’t really carry with it any profound agenda that’ll delude your readers into an overpowered assumption which might disappoint them. It’s light, yet romantic in a way. I really cannot think of a better title for a romantic one-shot that revolves around brief encounters.
Rating: [10/10].
2-Description/Foreword: Though the description could’ve been elongated and put to better use, it’s sufficient enough to carry out the initiative preface on its own. Not bad, but could use improvement.
Rating: [8/10].
3-Plot: So far, the beginning is absolutely incredible. The scenery description is marvelous and paired with an elevated use of diction. It’s incredible and sophisticatedly intricate. The build-up is impressively adequate but could end up becoming boring, because, for a one-shot, the plotline felt void and hollow in some parts. Have you considered filler scenes? Something simple to fill up between major events and keep your readers interested. I recommend adding in a few descriptive memories of the couple, something to remind your audience of the durability and capacity of these two’s relationship. Again, the build-up for the romance is quite well; however, you might want to strengthen the dialogue between the two because despite having the smallest aspect of romance, the dialogue appeared dry and boring during the initial acquaintance of these two. I don’t think I have anything else to point out considering the length of your one-shot. Good luck!
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