“Save Me Your Last Dance”

By: Real_dimples

Reviewer: Gtoprenaissance.

1-Title: Right, so the title definitely bespeaks of a romantic plot, perhaps one with a tragic ambiance. The title isn’t striking or that interesting, really; only because usually those two themes have been paired together since the Shakespearean times. Here’s the thing, in literature, there’s a trend that started during the impressionistic genre where the title of the literary work contains foreshadowing if the ending. “Save Me Your Last Dance” denotes of a tragic ending, perhaps elicited by a certain Hamartia.

Rating: [6/10].

2-Description/foreword: I won’t rate you for this component, considering you haven’t fully constructed your story.

Rating: [-/10].

3-Plot: The beginning of the story is interesting; I don't recommend changing a thing. That’s at least up until you’ve directly interpreted the psychological dilemma with your main character; it shouldn’t be disclosed so nonchalantly. Your plot needs girth, and this psychological (and possibly physical) dilemma shouldn’t even be grazed during the beginning, otherwise, it’ll make your story appear rushed and incomplete. Here’s the thing, despite the fact that your story is considerably long, it’s not a trouble to go through because of your use of diction; it’s very ineffective and serves your plot poorly. When constructing a tragedy, the metrical foundation of it is purely encapsulated within the proper use of diction. In order to elicit a catharsis or a reaction from your audience, you need to use literature-appropriate synonyms; nothing too fancy or complex, merely something promising to assure your readers that this story is different from the thousands of tragedies on this platform.

May I make a suggestion? It’s merely a suggestion; you don’t have to work by it. Avoid the whole implication of the cheating husband and broken wife sub-plot, it’s overly exhausted and predictable; I suggest that you take a different, more creative route. I’m only suggesting this because I’ve reviewed over 23 stories and nearly all of them contained that sub-plot. Avoid introducing new minor characters without providing an efficient background that correlates positively to this character’s role. If the character is minor or less round than other characters then its background